Question

I am writing an essay for Rutgers u and i just need some advice in improving this paragraph. plz help

I will contribute to the Rutgers by being whom I am, willing to help people will be my main contribution to the college. From 8th grade until the very moment, I meet newcomers and help them with giving information about the classes, the language, how they should study each subject, and sometimes even basic facts about the country itself. Similarly, I will contribute to Rutgers’ new students.

Answer 1

@monokerous can u plz help?

Answer 2

this is about my contribution to rutgers u

Answer 3

ESSAY PROMPT

Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our website will be considered.

Answer 4

I am only good at grammar, so I'll point out those errors:
whom I am should be: "who I am"

Answer 5

ehh a lot of misused words here, gimme a min

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i need help fixing grammar and making the sentences connect the ideas in a pleasant way

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I will contribute to the Rutgers by simply being who I am - a person willing to help others. This is going to be my main contribution to the college, since I already do it in high school. For example, since the 8th grade, I have been meeting the newcomers and helping them by providing information about the classes, the language, how they should study each subject, and sometimes, even basic facts about the country itself. Similarly, I am planning to help Rutgers’ freshmen.

Answer 8

ok thanku so much :)

Answer 9

Get more feedback on it though, I'm a math major, not an english major lol

Answer 10

ok

Answer 11

I believe the new edited version is great, but maybe you can put in an example

Answer 12

what do u mean ?

Answer 13

an example on how you have helped people

Answer 14

I mean that I have a degree in Mathematics, and I don't know that much of liberal arts. :)

Answer 15

oh ok yeah i get u @Agent47 but i did not get @erdog82 at first

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I mean that I am going to college and I study Mathematics, not Writing. Do you still not get what I said @Nali? :)

Answer 17

I do :D

Answer 18

you were talking to me correct?

Answer 19

I mean that I am going to a university where I have taken a Mathematics course, Nali. :)

Answer 20

This is so confusing....

Answer 21

No... I mean that I study Mathematics at a university! I might not be the best choice for this question :)

Answer 22

yes i was talking to @erdog82 not @Agent47 but when he did not get my comment, i had to tell min that i understand what he stated earlier

Answer 23

it is ok

Answer 24

@Agent47 i don't think @Nali is talking to you

Answer 25

oh ok @Agent47

Answer 26

He should know that trolling on a tutoring website is weird he should go on youtube or something @Agent47

Answer 27

@Nali, write the way you would normally write. I think it's safe to say that all universities value character. Basically, I'm just trying to tell you not to worry too much about your grammar, though I think it would help for you to be conscious of any obvious errors or mistakes you make. The whole essay should match up. If one part has flawless grammar and another part has a few mistakes here and there, they'd get suspicious. But that's just my opinion. Maybe you could write your whole essay down in a thread and we could read it as one cohesive essay? That way, it would be much easier for us to help you.

Answer 28

ok