Question

Can someone check or fix my thesis statement. "I realized that learning to read and write can benefit you in life, if you don't give up."

Answer 1

i realised, leaning to read read and write could be beneficial provided that we must not give up

Answer 2

Avoid words like "can" and "may, as they are less assertive than just saying that reading/writing benefits. Also using the 2nd person in a paper isn't a good idea because you don't know what your audience is experiencing necessarily. I would try to define what exactly is being benefited by reading and writing (in other words, how does it benefit us?)

Answer 3

A thesis statement should be stated as FACT, even if you don't know that it is.
Try this:
Learning to read and write is one of the most important things you can do for yourself; if you persevere, your future will benefit greatly.