CAN SOME1 HELP ME FINE TUNE THIS PAPER?? THX

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Paper?

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attachment

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its only five paragraph

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Read Aloud to Yourself used wrong words in certain places. :)

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I tried that and I dont know where

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first paragraph
I think that students***

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Bullying to some students is having to fit in the crowd.

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Mix up your paragraphs some of the sentences dont flow with the others.

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mix up the sentences in the paragraphs i mean

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what would be a good title

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The Exploit Of Bullying

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How about that?

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That sounds good, thank you very much. Is there any other grammar errors from what you see? Thanks again

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Np umm one sec

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*Bullying can be a physical and metal issue. 1st paragraph
2nd paragraph 
Bullies pick on students who do not fit in the crowd.
When the innocent student doesn't want to have any part, that is when the bullying begins.
Bullying can be a sort of verbal and physical harm.
Bullies dont care how you feel at all. 3rd paragraph
Fix fourth paragraph last sentence
Anything you talk about "back then" should be All In One paragraph by itself.

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Thanks very much