Anybody interested in reading my stories

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anonymous · Answer

And here is the link http://www.wattpad.com/7778495-a-tale-of-friends

anonymous · Answer

Please correct the mistakes. I am not so fond of tenses

anonymous · Answer

Well, the first thing I have to say is "the sentence structures need to be changed".
The second paragraph contains no variations. They are in simple form and short too. To avoid this, combine two or three sentences into a compound sentence.

The last phrase of the intro paragraph should be "..why they WERE for."

anonymous · Answer

"Yasuda had been Joni's best friend before Yasuda died in a fight crash.."

anonymous · Answer

Thanks. Is there any grammar mistakes, please correct it.