Question

does this make sense

Chicago has been one of the most crime-ridden cities in America. It has been murder capital of America several times and continues to show startling numbers of crime ever increasing.

Answer 1

makes sense, but it can be better. want my opinion?

Answer 2

maybe wut grade r u in

Answer 3

college

Answer 4

meh ok

Answer 5

You have two sentences, but the first--and the beginning of the second are very choppy. I would have connected the two, then used a transitional word to start the second sentence. Also, its only two lines, and you used America twice...


I would have written it like:
Chicago has been one of the most crime-ridden cities the United States; having the honor of being the murder capital of America several times. These facts are not changing, and the city continues to show startling numbers of ever increasing crime.

I tried to keep all your wording, while giving my input. Just my opinion :)