Question

Fix or edit this sentence?

Answer 1

Louis Armstrong, often regarded as one of the founders of jazz, represented its great power and influence.

Answer 2

Louis Armstrong, often regarded as one of the founders of jazz, represented the great power and influence of jazz.

Answer 3

Its too repetitive but I need this sentence in my essay somehow.. please help. Thank you

Answer 4

I see nothing wrong with your original "Louis Armstrong, often regarded as one of the founders of jazz, represented its great power and influence".

But English is like a box of legos - you can take sentences apart and put them back together backwards just to set a different cadence: Often regarded as one of the great founders of jazz, Louis Armstrong represented its great power and influence.

Or you can swap out words and phrases to get a different flavor: Louis Armstrong is such an icon for jazz's great power and influence that he is often regarded as one of its greatest founders.

Don't know if these are any good for you, but maybe they'll at least give you a kickstart... :-)

Answer 5

In some of my Graduate Literature classes, my teachers taught us never to use passive words in a formal paper, and to never put a phrase between commas as a side note because it reduces the motion and power of the sentence. The sentences that Emfederin has offered as alternatives are beautiful, though. I personally like the last one. :)