in fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks that swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired.

What is the best way to revise sentence 2?

In fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks. That swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired.

In fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks, that swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired.

In fact, his legs felt as if they were. Windsocks that swayed with the whisper of the breeze. He was tired.

Question

in fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks that swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired. 

What is the best way to revise sentence 2?


In fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks. That swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired.

In fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks, that swayed with the whisper of the breeze he was tired.

In fact, his legs felt as if they were. Windsocks that swayed with the whisper of the breeze. He was tired.

anonymous · Answer

None of those are grammatically correct. It would have to be "In fact, his legs felt as if they were windsocks that swayed with the whisper of the breeze. He was tired."