Question

What change in the second-to-last sentence makes clear what the writer learned from the experience?

Answer 1

First Draft
I have always loved to perform. My parents tell me that when I was only three years old, I would put on a show for anyone. When I was in the fifth grade, I had a part in the school Christmas pagent. I really enjoyed the applause my little song received. In my sophomore year in high school I got a part in the spring revue. I performed in it and also helped write it.The audience seemed to love it. I knew that entertaining people was what I wanted to do.

Revision
I have always loved to perform. My parents tell me that when I was only three years old, I would entertain anyone who would listen. When I was in the fifth grade, I had a part in the school Christmas pageant. I really enjoyed the applause my little performance received. Even more, I loved the laughter that came from the audience. In my sophomore year in high school I got a part in the spring revue. I not only performed in it, but also helped write what I hoped would be a funny skit. The waves of laughter from the audience told me that both the skit and I were, indeed, funny. It was then that I knew that making people laugh was what I wanted to do.

Answer 2

I think the author made it detailed and descriptive which makes the readers believe he/she has learned from his/her experience.

Take a look at the previous paragraph second to last sentence.
"The audience seemed to love it."

The next paragraph second to last sentence.
The waves of laughter from the audience told me that both the skit and I were, indeed, funny.