Question

CAN SOMEONE HELP ME MAKE A THESIS STATEMENT

Answer 1

It depends on the subject... But I could try.

Answer 2

its about the world we live in. positive points on it.

Answer 3

I just gave a detailed lesson on this in the question prior to yours. Check here: http://openstudy.com/study#/updates/523dee7ae4b0900154171450

Answer 4

Well how about: Even though the world has its fair share of cruel and vile behavior, there are also many positive points to it.
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Answer 5

That is a good start. You may want to revise as you actually come up with your main supporting points.

Answer 6

i have the 3 supporting points: global warming, advancements, and free education.

Answer 7

Okay. Now state each of your points as a sentence.

Answer 8

Also state your opinion as a simple sentence, i.e., The world as not all bad.

Answer 9

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Answer 10

Even though the world has its fair share of cruel and vile behavior, there are also many positive points to it. Global warming, advancements, and free education are all positive examples as to why the world is great.
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Answer 11

Okay. That is not a thesis statement since it is more than one sentence, but it's a start.

So from what you have here is what I can gather, but needs to be stated more clearly, so work with me here.

Opinion: The world is great.
Strongest support: Advancements . . . [need a brief sentence as to why advancements make the world great and what advancements you are referring to.]
2nd strongest support: Free education . . . [again, why?]
3rd support or counter argument: Global warming . . . [most consider global warming a negative thing in which case it could make your counter argument, if you mean it as a positive thing, we must state why. Either way we need a full sentence to work with.]

Answer 12

ok i see what you're saying, but can i still use Even though the world has its fair share of cruel and vile behavior, there are also many positive points to it? or should i change it up?

Answer 13

I would maybe consider changing it and here is why. The way that you have it stated implies that you have a counterpoint to your opinion, but the counter point is way to broad. Face it we could sit here all day and list pages and pages of cruel and vile behavior that goes on in the world. Remember, everything you mention in your thesis statement MUST appear in your thesis. So if you want to mention cruel and vile behavior, you need to narrow it down to something more specific.

If you are not intending to mention any cruel and vile behavior in your thesis, leave it out of your thesis statement.

Answer 14

The world is an enormous place, therefore having many positive points about it?

Answer 15

Here is just a quick example of a thesis statement using the information that I have (keep in mind, I don't know what exactly you have researched or the points that you are trying to make, so I'm making up my own points to show you where I'm coming from):

Even though global warming is threatening the world, people still have access to free education and technological advancements make life easier.

Now this is not great in the least because there is very little connection between global warming and free education and technological advancements, but you should be able to see how I formed that thesis statement. Also notice how specific it is. The reader should be able to clearly see what you will be talking about in your thesis.

Answer 16

What level of writing are you doing? (grade level)

Answer 17

college freshman

Answer 18

Cool. The post I referred to before is a very good method of creating your thesis statement. It looks like you could probably do with some more specific help though, so let me ask what your general topic for this paper is. What does the syllabus state that your assignment is?

Answer 19

okay it says, imagine that you must create an essay for a time capsule one hundred years your descendants will read what you have written. how would you describe the world you are living in today? give example to show that our world has positive or negative points

Answer 20

Okay good. I can better see where you were going with your initial statement. Now, are you willing to devote one paragraph in your paper to the negative things in the world? If not, leave it out of your statement. If you are willing to devote that paragraph then you could use the vile clause as part of your statement. The negative paragraph would only have to list a few things in a very general manner. The tricky part is making the two positive paragraphs outshine the negative. In other words, despite the negative things you mention, these positive things make the world a good place to live.

If you do not want to mention the negative at all then a simple statement like:

Technological advancements, free education, and [something else positive] make the world we live in today great.

Something along those lines. This is a more informal assignment, so a more simple approach to the thesis would suffice. Even so, your thesis should mention the points you will make.

Answer 21

Another thing. Do not get too attached to your initial thesis statement. They tend to evolve as you write your paper. Don't be afraid to go back to it and refine it as you go.