Question

Is this good? The grammar and punctuation? Everything else?

Answer 1

Invent dialogue and revise the following paragraph. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

Answer 2

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy.

"Ashley," said Ashley's mother. "I don't believe that you have time to care for a puppy right now."
"Your mother's right Ashley," Ashley's father said nodding. "You have a lot of work to do."
"You're three weeks behind on Science and two weeks behind on Math!" shouted his brother. "The last thing you need is a puppy Ashley!"
"I promise to catch up on my work!" argued Ashley. "I'll even do extra chores for a month if I must, I'll come up with a plan!"

Ashley's family thought and thought. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

Answer 3

Yep!

Answer 4

Seems pretty good to me. O:

Answer 5

HE HE HE

Answer 6

Of course it is, it is made by me after all ;)

Answer 7

Perhaps instead of periods after "said Ashley's mother", should it be a comma?

Answer 8

And other dialogue speaker changes as well?

Answer 9

@austinL I asked that same question last time! I'm confused with that part too >.<

Answer 10

I think it is with a comma >.>

Answer 11

As in it becomes a different person? Yes
As in the period and comma thing, I'm still confused >.<

Answer 12

That is what I did in my short story. For dialogue.

Answer 13

Time for a he said she said lesson

Answer 14

@austinL I see :O I'm gonna go with the comma then! And it's needed on every part of the dialogue right? Not just the mother part?

Answer 15

http://openstudy.com/study#/updates/525c1855e4b0ede9e449923f

I think I did it correctly....

Answer 16

Austin, that was awesome man

Answer 17

THANKS EVERYONE Q_Q

Answer 18

You're very welcome charlie!

Answer 19

I changed it! How does this look?

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy.

"I don't believe that you have time to care for a puppy right now." Said his mother.
"Your mother's right Ashley. You have a ton of work to do!" Said his father.
"You are so behind! Not only on your work, but in school too! The last thing you need is a puppy Ashley!" Shouted his brother.
"I promise to catch up on my work! I'll finish my homework and get back on pace!" Ashley yelled. "I'll even do extra chores for a month if I must! I'll come up with a plan!" Ashley cried.

His family thought and thought. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

Answer 20

maybe don't say Ashley cried at the end
and after someone talks put a comma
like "'...for a puppy right now,' said his mother."
but not after an exclamation point so keep "'...is a puppy!' Shouted his brother." the same
...make sense ??

Answer 21

@DanielleWardrip Like this? :)

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy.

"I don't believe that you have time to care for a puppy right now." Said his mother.
"Your mother's right Ashley. You have a ton of work to do!" Said his father.
"You are so behind! Not only on your work, but in school too! The last thing you need is a puppy Ashley!" Shouted his brother.
"I promise to catch up on my work! I'll finish my homework and get back on pace!" Ashley cried. "I'll even do extra chores for a month if I must! I'll come up with a plan!"

Ashley's family thought and thought. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

Answer 22

yeah that looks better :)

Answer 23

Hurrah! Thank you!

Answer 24

yeah no problem

Answer 25

I'll get ya a medal :)