How is this? Constructive criticism?
When I first met you,
I never realized how much you'd mean to me.
We talked constantly, everyday,
You became a part of my life.
I still remember all your favorite things to do,
From sleeping on your bed all day,
To watching TV all night.
Oh! And lets not forget the laughs we shared.
Some days my stomach would ache
And other days my cheeks would tire.
You made my problems go away.
You made me feel as if things weren't so bad.
I could feel myself getting better.
So you see,
When I first met you,
I didn't realize how much you'd mean to me.

Question

How is this? Constructive criticism?  
When I first met you,
I never realized how much you'd mean to me.
We talked constantly, everyday,
You became a part of my life.
I still remember all your favorite things to do,
From sleeping on your bed all day,
To watching TV all night.
Oh! And lets not forget the laughs we shared.
Some days my stomach would ache
And other days my cheeks would tire.
You made my problems go away.
You made me feel as if things weren't so bad.
I could feel myself getting better.
So you see,
When I first met you,
I didn't realize how much you'd mean to me.

anonymous · Answer

I don't think it is.

lifeisadangerousgame · Answer

If this is a poem, I don't think it has a rhythm. Doesn't  have to necessarily rhyme, but rhyming is nice in a poem.

anonymous · Answer

@Blake777 Huh?  @LifeIsADangerousGame Okay. Thank you.

anonymous · Answer

I read your question wrong, my bad.

anonymous · Answer

I like it, especially the wording here "Some days my stomach would ache
And other days my cheeks would tire."

lifeisadangerousgame · Answer

I think it's good kecet, I like it. I was rushing (apologies) and didn't really read it through, but it is good!