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who wants to proof read my essay pleaseeeee ! ?

Answer 1

Where is it?

Answer 2

I will do it(;

Answer 3

There Was A Time When
There was a time in my life when I was able to do anything that I wanted, whenever I wanted my mom had no control over me and she was the only one around. She was always too drunk to care. She had friends over 24/7 and acted like she had no responsibilities.
There was so much stress that I would never let show. Everyone would think that I was just always so happy. I would never cry or show my sorrow. Why? Because then I would have to tell people why I was sad and it was just a very emotional thing to talk about and a bit embarrassing. I would have suicide thoughts because of my mom’s actions; I figured that if I could just end it all its one less kid around to make my mom miserable. I would think that because I thought that my mom’s problem started because of me. She would always tell me that when I would cry. She would say “I’m like this because of you! I can’t handle you and you need to just go! Leave!” I never knew whether to go or if she was just having an emotional break down again.
I constantly had thoughts about leaving and never coming back but I was never able to leave my sister and she never wanted to leave. I tried so many times to leave that house but it never happened; my plans never went through as I had planned. I basically raised myself and tried to raise my little sister. I had friends that cared and that was all that I had at the time. My dad was in and out of jail so he was out of the picture at the time too. My grandma lived with us but was kind of off into her own world most of the time. She couldn’t handle my mom so she would leave most nights and go out to her moms.
I would go out and party about every day with my friends and I was only 13. But it was the only way that I could get through with my pain without crying or doing something stupid. That was when I started to meet all of the realist people in my life though. The ones who don’t have as much as others are a lot more real and honest with each other I came to find out. Everyone knew everyone and we all got along most of the time. We were all so close to where we were able to tell each other almost anything. We all cared for each other and watch out for one and another. When I had first moved out there I thought that it was going to be difficult to make friends since it was in the middle of the school year but, it was really easy. I went to the lodge one day and everyone knew that I was new and they all treated me as if I had been there for as long as everyone else. There were at least 50 of us kids at the time from ages 12 to 18 all kicking it. There wasn’t a day that I was home that summer. It was so much fun while it lasted but now looking back on all of that it sucks. I was 13 on my own it seemed like. I had so many responsibilities for my age. It was kind of like 13 going on 30.But I didn’t have near as many responsibilities as a lot of kids.
My best friend, Sammy has been taking care of her siblings since she was 6 years old to now and she’s 15. I’m so close to her family to where it hurts me to see her mom in the condition that she’s in. I’m always scared that they’re going to move far. There living condition is unbelievable and it’s not steady at all. I was in that exact position about a year ago before my mom lost us and decided to get clean. I know just how she feels about the whole situation too and it sucks it really does and there’s nothing that she can do except for watch her mom waste her life. Her mom doesn’t realize how much it disturbs everyone else’s life around her and I know that only because I know a couple of people who have been in that situation and are now sober who have told me stories about how it made them feel and they didn’t realize how much it affected other people because of their mistakes.
I knew that my mom was using all those years but I didn’t know how to act upon it. Her sleeping schedule was the opposite of mine. She was up all night and asleep all day for a couple of years it was like that. I would cry almost once a day telling her how bad she has made my life and how she ruined our family but she couldn’t care less. It was sad seeing my mom like that for so long I started to forget what she was like sober. There were times when she had left for days and nobody had seen her so me and my sister would basically be on our own for days at a time but it wasn’t as hard as it seems. We were old enough to take care of ourselves just it was harder to see my mom gone and not knowing where she was and no matter how much I hated her for everything I still cared mainly just because she was my mom. There was nothing that was good about my mom at the time. I mean she broke her and my dad up by using drugs and her friend poisoned my dog slayer that was the family dog for about ten years, which yea she was getting old but she was still very healthy and had a long life time still ahead of her.
Want to hear how my mom finally decided to help herself?
One night my grandma came over and handed me my suit case out of the closet and said to pack all my stuff that I want and not to get anything that I don’t need because she’s bringing me to my dad’s. So I figured that my dad’s couldn’t be worse than my mom’s house. So me and my sister packed and said by to my mom. My mom had no clue that we were leaving for good she just thought that we were going to my grandmas for the weekend. Anyways we got settled into my dad’s and started a new school year there, made new friends and we were actually enjoying it not having to ever worry. Then a couple of months later around Christmas time we find out that my mom ended up realizing that her using didn’t help anyone. That meant that she wanted to better herself. So we put her in a rehab for 90 days and now she has been sober for a year now and she’s back to herself. My mom was never a bad person just a bad mom with bad decisions.



its a personal narrative
I don't know if I did it right :o that's what I asking

Answer 4

at the top when it says there was a time when that's the title I didn't repete and its like 6 different paragraphs message me the mistakes and thinkgs that I should change please cx

Answer 5

I think it sounds very nice, every thing is written very nice! One thing I have to point out is instead of putting numbers write them out for example: 24 = twenty four

Answer 6

okay thank you cx