Question

My poem that I wrote last night. :)

Answer 1

My Perfection

Too bad no one’s perfect. But I'm close to it. The world can beat me and put my head under water, but I'll still be breathing just fine.

Cause everything I do I give it my all with flaws and all.

I may stumble hit a rumble but never fall.

I breathe perfection, its my addiction as long as god is my protection I'll be just fine.

Just be my witness.

Just in case you can't open the attachment

Answer 2

Niceee

Answer 3

I like it!

Answer 4

Thank you! :) @Taylor<3sRin

Answer 5

Thanks! @razor99

Answer 6

No problemo

Answer 7

Reminds me of this https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TRNS0oAN2iI

Answer 8

That's pretty awesome, actually. xD @JessicaBBY

Answer 9

Thank you @april115, Incognlto

Answer 10

Do you like it? @wolfe8 :/

Answer 11

Yeah it's good. Not much rhyming, but that's your style. Personally I like rhymes but it doesn't mean this is no good.

Answer 12

Okay thanks @wolfe8

Answer 13

There's actually some good internal rhyming in it: in the first verse, we have the visual rhymes of "beat", "head", and "breathing", in the second paragraph we have the actual rhymes of "all", "flaws", and "all" again, in the third we have "rumble" and "stumble", and in the fourth we have "perfection", "addiction", and "protection", all of which add a pleasant flow to the poem.

Answer 14

I like it :)

Answer 15

Thank you @og_jessie

Answer 16

Wow... this is really good. Good job! c:

Answer 17

Thank you!! @EmilyCheyenne

Answer 18

It's good! Have you asked in Writing or Literature for more opinions?

Answer 19

Thank you, and no I didn't :)

Answer 20

You should for more opinions :D

Answer 21

Okay thank you :)

Answer 22

Ewww poems

Answer 23

Haha JKs :P I love it ^_^

Answer 24

Thanks!!

Answer 25

Great!

Answer 26

This is Fabulous, girl! I'm so jealous. ;)