Question

any enlgish teachers or majors in english, i really need help in my paper, please!

Answer 1

cant open the link.

Answer 2

copy and paste it please ?

Answer 3

I'm not an English teacher, but I have dealt with essay's quite often. What do you need help with? c:

Answer 4

that my phasing it good, my grammar and that my paragraph's subject are good

Answer 5

How soon do you need it completely edited and critiqued by?

Answer 6

an hour? do you think it will taken longer?

Answer 7

I think I can work with that.

Does your paper have to be in any certain format, and what grade are you in?

Answer 8

freshman in college, no its already in format

Answer 9

Do you have a link to the poem?

Answer 10

http://betweenstories.livejournal.com/548.html

Answer 11

So far your thesis is clear, which is good. I'm just thinking of spicing up wording right now. I haven't came across any major grammatical errors. :)

I'll read the poem first though, so I can get a better concept of your essay.

Answer 12

okay thank you so much

Answer 13

No problem, have you read Sherlock Holmes by any chance? I'd love to get a second opinion on my essay before I send it in. If not, I completely understand. c:

Answer 14

i would do that but first this essay is due any time

Answer 15

Just read the poem. :(

Sure, I'll edit this first since I understand you have a deadline.

Answer 16

okay why :(?

Answer 17

Oh, the abuse with the borders was just depressing to read about; then how both choose the paths that they do instead of showing kindness. I know it's reality, but it still is unfortunate.

I like how you showed the connection to animals, and used the language barrier as an example.

Answer 18

really great could you check my conclusion please

Answer 19

Sure. Noticed a quick typo in your thesis, after squinting. "symbolism in and tone showing position of dominance is never static. "

Answer 20

oh okay im going to fix

Answer 21

Overall I enjoyed your conclusion. My only question would be that this piece in your sentence confuses me-- "when something does not seem right setting the same tone as the Mexican women. "

Answer 22

I get your overall idea, but the wording of "when something does not seem right" seems a bit off.

Answer 23

like an unjustice

Answer 24

how would you fix it

Answer 25

when something does not seem right [such as] setting the same tone as the Mexican women.

It might just be me though.

Answer 26

could i submit?

Answer 27

Wait.
As mentioned before, the sunglasses, badge[,] and Jeep label the border patrol agent as the authority figure.

Answer 28

Since it is a list.

Answer 29

put :

Answer 30

The border patrol agent acts too arrogant, thinking that he rules over everything, included [including] her life.

Answer 31

She is not afraid because she has her own advantages [by] having knowledge of the land, survival skills, and allies.

Answer 32

I'll scan for grammatical errors again, but I think you are good. Unless you want to work on phrases, making sentences stronger, etc. I can understand if you are in a rush though.

Answer 33

what phases need work?

Answer 34

They are fine, but just give a bit more variety. I noticed that you often use 'she' 'he', etc.

Answer 35

Something like this sentence: She is switching the setting of the poem by making herself the hunter, and the border patrol agent the animal.

Making herself the hunter and the border patrol agent the animal, she switches the setting of the poem.

Answer 36

thats good! ill do that

Answer 37

How much more time do you have?

Answer 38

25 min

Answer 39

I'd say go through and look for any sentences you can modify or add detail to. Don't go over board and create purple prose or anything, but just add a little bit of fluff to up the word count.

Answer 40

See if you can strengthen your conclusion at all. It's good, but I can see points where you could put more emphasis. Just don't sound redundant. Finally, use your last ten minutes to do one more scan to make sure we both caught all the errors.

Answer 41

okay thank you

Answer 42

No problem.
Good luck on your essay. Let me know if after you turn yours in if you want to look over mine. c:

Answer 43

can you send me yours

Answer 44

Sure. Thank you for looking it over in advanced. :)
Really let me know if I ramble at all, I feel so much can be left out and I just miss the point in parts.

Answer 45

it doesnt open

Answer 46

it doesnt open

Answer 47

are you not going to send it

Answer 48

Holmes replies after explaining the meaning that "it was simply a ruse to divert inquiry into a wrong channel" (22). i would take away that

Answer 49

Mormons were depicted as greedy and cruel, forcing polygamy on young woman that they kidnapped. i would put a youg women or the young women

Answer 50

So impacted readers have been, that many letters appealed to Doyle to help with current crimes. take away comma

Answer 51

add comma 2011,
In 2011 a parent in Virginia complained to the Albemarle School Board to remove the novel from its reading list,

Answer 52

, a parent in Virginia

Answer 53

remove comma There is death in one and life in the other" (73). Hypocrisy is displayed through the character of Hope,

Answer 54

comma needed Watson is the foil to Holmes in A Study in Scarlet, his obtuseness making Holmes' deductions all the more brilliant.

Answer 55

Although murder is not consistent in every day lives, people still hear about the sin every day ......everyday one wrod

Answer 56

dont use so many contractions like it's can't

Answer 57

Abductive reasoning and Holmes' use of forensic science is much more familiar to readers now then it would be back when the novel was written.
this sentences needs a comma

Answer 58

Still here, lol. Just listening. c:

Answer 59

other then that dont make sentencs too long and if you can make smaller paragraphs

Answer 60

I think she want's me to go with the 5 paragraph thing, but sub paragraphs would definitely be helpful.

Answer 61

then yeah try that

Answer 62

Anything else? I really want to find a way to strengthen my conclusion because it feels weak to me.

Answer 63

no comma Friendship can be valued regardless of the century,

Answer 64

As the date of The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes ticks forward, the (passionate) readers share (from) the series (that) never dies.

Answer 65

Friendship's can be valued regardless

Answer 66

most famed relationships as it grows (from one series to the other)

Answer 67

just need a little of sentence structure but i like it

Answer 68

just need a little of sentence structure but i like it

Answer 69

Thanks. (:

I just felt it was far too brief compared to the other paragraphs. But usually readers don't want a super-long conclusion so I guess it works.

Answer 70

just need a little of sentence structure but i like it

Answer 71

it does...are you in high school?

Answer 72

it does...are you in high school?

Answer 73

Kind of. I working to get my AA so I am taking part time courses at the local community college. English 101. :P

Answer 74

it does...are you in high school?

Answer 75

oh congrats hope it goes well, hopefully we can help eachother out the rest of this semester

Answer 76

Yes! That would be awesome. I'm always adding way to many commas, in everything.

Answer 77

yeah im sentence structure needs work.. i guess we will message eachother a day in advanced to help each other out?

Answer 78

That'd be sweet. I love creative writing so I always go over-board in my essays with detail and fluff. But your style is really concise and straight to the point, I like it. :)

Answer 79

ha thanks i like to get it over with hah

Answer 80

It makes sense.

I love Sherlock Holmes, so this was like one of my dream essays. That sounds crazy. How can you have a dream essay? o.O

Answer 81

dream essay? no idea

Answer 82

Exactly. No idea.

Thank you for helping out again, I really appreciated it. :D

Answer 83

no problem...take again

Answer 84

I'm going to pull my essay off because I'm paranoid with the Internet, you might want to do the same lol because it is a good essay.

Answer 85

okay thanks