What a mess I am... (poem)

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linda3 · Answer

I’ve been used, 
I’ve been bruised, 
I’ve been stolen, 
I’ve been taken…. what a mess I am….

I don’t know who I am… 
I don’t know who I was….
I’m trying to look back 
but that was just a lie

Is there anyone out there
Is there anyone here
I’m falling in the deep
trying to catch my feet

What I thought was true
What I thought is merely dreams
falling and fading
like a bird with feather steeled wings

Someone help me 
Someone won’t you see 
I’m just another person
trying to save a life

Holding my breath scared to breath
Holding my breath trying to quiet reality
what else is there to do
seeking for an answer

Another stranger saving strangers
Another stranger sharing smiles
I am just a person
but what a mess I am in

Who I am
No one knows
No one cares to see
it doesn’t matter to me

I’ve been loved
I’ve been hugged
I’ve been happy
what a mess I am.... but this is just plain old me

dumbsearch2 · Answer

It's okay.

linda3 · Answer

Erm...

jigglypuff314 · Answer

me like ^_^
good job :D
me enjoyed the repetition :)

anonymous · Answer

LINDA!! I like it! It's beautiful!

linda3 · Answer

thank you so much!!! <3

anonymous · Answer

your welcome!

dumbsearch2 · Answer

In my opinion, it's okay, just this subject has been hackneyed so many times that it's become a platitude. 

Good work though.

dumbsearch2 · Answer

It's interesting though, and it saves it from becoming insipid, because you're expressing a person with variagated emotions...

esshotwired · Answer

awww greek sissy! I LUV IT <3

dumbsearch2 · Answer

I particually like the 7th paragraph. It becomes colorful there.

dumbsearch2 · Answer

The repetition is also done tastefully. I like that.

linda3 · Answer

thank you @esshotwired and @dumbsearch2

dumbsearch2 · Answer

Sorry for being so blunt...

linda3 · Answer

lol you're fine. You are just a very opinionated person. ;-)

adrynicoleb · Answer

Linda, great job. I love it!! (★^O^★)

linda3 · Answer

thanks nicole! :)

dumbsearch2 · Answer

I love how expressive you are with your underlying motifs. It gives the piece a feel of unity.

I'm not a great poet, hardly, so I have no right to criticize :-) Sorry.

timaashorty · Answer

Loved it! goodjob Linda [:

anonymous · Answer

I really liked it @linda3

anonymous · Answer

It could improve with the use of alliteration to make it more memorable.

anonymous · Answer

What I thought as merely dreams
Steele feathered wings
Holding my breath scared to breathe

linda3 · Answer

yeah.... I suck at writing poems....