Question

Please help correct my essay..!! im stuck..!

Answer 1

. “I love Dancing.
I wanted to be a ballerina so I Started Dancing at 5 Years old. I adored it so much, I continued and did it best too my ability, I worked hard and never gave up. What have I done since then? IV continued dancing and I have also helped and taught others. The plus side of dancing is feeling calm free. For me dancing is my life; I love every moment of it good or bad. A Disadvantage for dancing is receiving constant injuries and foot cramps.
Do I wish for others to place more dancing in their lives? I absolutely do without a doubt, I would because you can put your time on something good and not get yourself into trouble like other teens these days have. It also is a great work out, tones and shapes the body. It also increases flexibility and strength and stamina. Furthermore everybody does better with exercise.
How has Dancing helped me? First off IV been dancing over 16 years and I have not quit. Even with all the pain, it showed me how to endure press forward and adapt. It gave me discipline and courage to do my best. It also Kept me calm and my emotions in check, even when things where difficult. Physically I felt strong, graceful, elegant, and beautiful. I can Express how I feel Sad, Angry, Happy, in love etc. I always feel myself when I dance no matter if the style is Ballet, Tap, Jazz, Lyrical or Toe Dancing.
What will I do with Dancing the Future? I’m going to teach and pass on my passion for dancing unto others. Inspire them bringing them joy and happiness. My favorite part of teaching is that I can learn new things; I also love watch my students grow and enjoy what I also love and care about. It’s a wonderful moment knowing you passed on your passion unto someone elts, so they can cherish it and carry it on also.
I Love Dancing with all my heart and I will never quit. Even threw the pain and trials I’ve been through, it has always been my Anker my deep strength. It also gave me joy when I was bown. It gave me courage to keep going no matter the struggle. I Hope to someday pass on my passion for dancing unto others. .. its not done.. i need to add more too the end i think..?? or is it good the way it is??

Answer 2

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Answer 3

aww thank you..=) ill try it..=)

Answer 4

No problem! :D

Answer 5

. ok hows this it changes a few words.

“I love Dancing.
I wanted to be a ballerina so I Started Dancing at 5 Years old. I adored it so much, I continued and did it best too my ability, I worked hard and never gave up. What have I done since then? IV continued dancing and I have also helped and taught others. The plus side of dancing is feeling calm free. For me dancing is my life; I love every moment of it good or bad. A Disadvantage for dancing is receiving constant injuries and foot cramps.
Do I wish for others to place more dancing in their lives? I absolutely do without a doubt, I would because you can put your time on something good and not get yourself into trouble like other teens these days have. It also is a great work out, tones and shapes the body. It also increases flexibility and strength and stamina. Furthermore everybody does better with exercise.
How has Dancing helped me? First off IV been dancing over 16 years and I have not quit. Even with all the pain, it showed me how to endure press forward and adapt. It gave me discipline and courage to do my best. It also Kept me calm and my emotions in check, even when things where difficult. Physically I felt strong, graceful, elegant, and beautiful. I can Express how I feel Sad, Angry, Happy, in love etc. I always feel myself when I dance no matter if the style is Ballet, Tap, Jazz, Lyrical or Toe Dancing.
What will I do with Dancing the Future? I’m going to teach and pass on my passion for dancing unto others. Inspire them bringing them joy and happiness. My favorite part of teaching is that I can learn new things; I also love watch my students grow and enjoy what I also love and care about. It’s a wonderful moment knowing you passed on your passion unto someone els, so they can cherish it and carry it on also.
I Love Dancing with all my heart and I will never quit. Even through the pain and trials I’ve been through, it has always been my Acker my deep strength. It also gave me joy when I was down. It gave me courage to keep going no matter the struggle. I Hope to someday pass on my passion for dancing unto others.

Answer 6

At the beginning, started, should not be capitalized.

Answer 7

Instead of saying "The plus side" say "The positive side."

Answer 8

Instead of saying " calm free" put "and" in between the words.

Answer 9

thank you very much..=) ill make the changes ..=) besides that.do you think its a good essay??..=)

Answer 10

I'll look at it, too.

Answer 11

Yes, it's a great essay! Mind if I tell you more grammar mistakes?

Answer 12

aww thank you..=) yes please do..=)

Answer 13

Disadvantage should be not capitalized...

Answer 14

ok..=) thank you.. say some more please..=)

Answer 15

I absolutely do without a doubt because you can put your time on something good and not get yourself into trouble like other teens these days have.

Answer 16

work out should be workout.

Answer 17

that you..=) ok keep going..=)

Answer 18

It also increases flexibility,strength, and stamina.

Answer 19

Put a comma after "Furthermore."

Answer 20

Furthermore, everybody improves with exercising.

Answer 21

Dancing should not be capitalized.

Answer 22

"IV" should be I've.

Answer 23

...how to endure, press forward, and adapt.

Answer 24

Kept, should not be capitalized.

Answer 25

"...even when things where difficult."- change where to were.

Answer 26

Put comma after "Physically."

Answer 27

"Express" should not be capitalized.

Answer 28

"Sad, Angry, Happy..." should not be capitalized.

Answer 29

"Dancing the Future" should not be capitalized and put "in" between dancing and the.

Answer 30

"for dancing unto others" instead of unto, put, to.

Answer 31

"unto others. Inspire them bringing them joy and happiness."-put commas

Answer 32

"part of teaching" instead of, put about.

Answer 33

"I also love watch my students" put "to" in between love and watch.

Answer 34

"unto someone els"-else

Answer 35

been my Acker my deep strength- fix this.

Answer 36

"Hope" should not be capitalized.

Answer 37

That's it :)

Answer 38

wow thank you..=)

Answer 39

ok so what do i do for this.. "been my Acker my deep strength."

Answer 40

deep strength

Answer 41

What is an Acker?

Answer 42

one second it spelled it wrong let me get the correct spelling..

Answer 43

anker heres the actual spelling..

Answer 44

anchor?

Answer 45

i changed it to this.. does this sound better..=) Even threw the pain and trials I’ve been through, it has always been my strength.

Answer 46

.been my anchor, my deep strength

Answer 47

=)

Answer 48

Yes, except instead of "threw" correct it into "through."

Answer 49

Thank you verry much..=)

Answer 50

No problem :)

Answer 51

. “I love Dancing.
I wanted to be a ballerina so I started dancing at 5 Years old. I adored it so much, I continued and did it best too my ability, I worked hard and never gave up. What have I done since then? I've continued dancing and I have also helped and taught others. The positive side of dancing is feeling calm and free. For me dancing is my life; I love every moment of it good or bad. A disadvantage for dancing is receiving constant injuries and foot cramps.
Do I wish for others to place more dancing in their lives? I absolutely do without a doubt because you can put your time on something good and not get yourself into trouble like other teens these days have. It also is a great workout, tones and shapes the body. It also increases flexibility, strength, and stamina. Furthermore, everybody improves with exercising.
How has dancing helped me? First off I've been dancing over 16 years and I have not quit. Even with all the pain, it showed me how to endure, press forward, and adapt. It gave me discipline and courage to do my best. It also kept me calm and my emotions in check, even when things were difficult. Physically, I felt strong, graceful, elegant, and beautiful. I can express how I feel sad, angry, happy, in love etc. I always feel myself when I dance no matter if the style is Ballet, Tap, Jazz, Lyrical or Toe dancing.
What will I do with dancing in the Future? I’m going to teach and pass on my passion for dancing to others, Inspire them bringing them joy and happiness, My favorite part about teaching is that I can learn new things; I also love to watch my students grow and enjoy what I also love and care about. It’s a wonderful moment knowing you passed on your passion unto someone else, so they can cherish it and carry it on also.
I Love dancing with all my heart and I will never quit. Even through the pain and trials I've been through, it has always been my anchor, my deep strength. It also gave me joy when I was down. It gave me courage to keep going no matter the struggle. I hope to someday pass on my passion for dancing to others. with changes Hows this..=)

Answer 52

heres the end result.. hows this.. this was a message from another user.. how would we use this.. The essay is basically good, and you have shown that you can go from topic to outline to write-up. There are several mistakes in it that will lower your grade, however. Not easy to correct by message or by the OpenStudy format. "Dancing" usually should not be capitalized within the essay did it to the best of my ability I've feeling calm and free For me, of it, good or bad. disadvantage doubt. I would, because work-out Furthermore, First off, I've years, and I endure, press forward, and adapt I can express how I feel: sad, angry, happy, in love, etc. no matter if the style is ballet, tap, jazz, lyrical, or toe dancing. dancing in the future? pass on my passion for dancing to others, and inspire them, bringing them joy and happiness. love to watch my passed on your passion to someone else, been my anchor, my deep strength I hope to some day pass on Lots of little changes will make a real difference in the teacher's perception of your essay. Good luck.

Answer 53

Do the same thing.

Answer 54

ok ill do my best..=) thank you very very much..=)

Answer 55

..douglaswinslowcooper

Answer 56

You have done very well, going from topic to outline to meaningful essay in a few hours. Congratulations.

Small changes:
five years old
First off,
feel: sad,
dance, no matter
future
I love
some day


Again, well done!

Answer 57

Aww Thank you..=) and thank you for all your hard work and patience with me..=)