Question

Is anyone willing to help me real quick?
-I'm writing an essay about abortion. I'm pretty stuck on how to describe the feeling before a girl finds she's pregnant..

Answer 1

>> I'm trying to describe the girl sneaking to the restroom with a pregrancy test. Nervously, she unwraps the box. Tests. Few minutes passed until she check the results. With her shivering fingers she picked up the test. It said positive. <<

I don't need help in describing her reaction, but just describing how she feels as she waits for her results like I wrote up there. Although I want it as 'You' instead she'

For example:
You run straight to the restroom without letting your mom see you. Biting your nails nervously, ... etc..
I want it very desrcibtive. If someone can help me, I would reaaally appreciate it. I'm not looking for alot. Just 3 to 5 sentences. Just a start. You can even take me through it and show me how I can write it if you don't want to write anything. Thank you

Answer 2

@austinL can you help?

Answer 3

u still need help?

Answer 4

Yes please {:

Answer 5

kk so tell me what you got so far?

Answer 6

I deleted what I wrote already since i kept messing up. my mind went blank. But I've also wrote a few on the question,soyou'll get an idea of what I'm trying to write.

Answer 7

kk

Answer 8

Betsy runs to the restroom in the resonant with out letting her mom see her. She is hiding a pregnantcy test(She is biting her nails nervously).

Answer 9

is she prego or no?

Answer 10

I want it as 'YOU' not betsy or she

Answer 11

It's a persuasive essay. I want it to be very descriptive which makes the person feel what pregnant girls endure when they find they're pregnant.

Answer 12

so like "I run to the restroom in thr restront with out letting my mother see me.

Answer 13

like that?

Answer 14

@TheOcean @Whitemonsterbunny17 @elementwielder

Answer 15

It's a persuasive essay? this is more loike a realistic fiction..... or non fiction...... what are you trying to perswade the reader to do..

Answer 16

i cant help you with that im a guy so this is a little awkward for me to be writing about... sorry

Answer 17

lol

Answer 18

lol

Answer 19

what the hell bunny!?!?

Answer 20

Lmaoo @element thanks though


It's going to be a persuasive essay, but I'm planning doing this differently by adding a dialog on top describing the girls,so the reader will sense what she's going through, and then later start my argument. Something the teacher suggested.

Answer 21

Nervously, You unwrap the box. Tests. Few minutes passed until you check the results. With your Fingers shivering you pick up the test. It said positive.You run to the restroom in the restaurant with out letting your mother see me. You are still Shaking, scared that you mother will be mad......... like tht?

Answer 22

:D if yes.... i probably can write alot more.

Answer 23

@timaashorty ?

Answer 24

Yes. I just need to add a little more description to it, otherwise it's just what I wanted.Now it got me started in my essay. Thank you so much all of you guys [:

Answer 25

You sneak quietly into the bathroom, praying that your mother doesn't see. Lock the door, relieved that she didn't notice. You nervously pull out the tester, but you have trouble because your hands are shaking so bad from the nerves. You finally get it out and administer the test, and now you wait. The couple of minutes seem to drag on forever as you wait for the results. You decide to check it again, just to see if it will come back. It has. It reads positive.

Answer 26

Sorry about the delay, I just logged on and saw this. That is what I just kinda threw together.

Answer 27

Yee thank you so much Austin! ^.^

Answer 28

I tagged you cuz I remember read your inspiration story a while back, so thought you might be good at this ;P

Answer 29

@the ocean I just noticed you wrote basically the same thing I wrote D': lol