Question

Can someone please read and criticizes my poems for school.

Answer 1

I was alone for some time.
No one to talk to,
But you were there
Just you and I.

I was hurt,
I was in pain,
No not physical,
But it still felt the same,
But you were there
Just you and I.

I tried to stop the tears
But pain would not stop scratching on the doors of my eyes.
But you were there
Just you and I.

When I thought I would allow death to come in,
When I saw that rope to be the only way
You were there
Just you and I.

When all I needed was a friend,
You were there
Just you and I.

When my light started to shine
When I realized all I needed was you,
You were there,
Just you and I.

Answer 2

@Compassionate

Answer 3

@happytales

Answer 4

This is terrible...

Answer 5

I'm just kidding lol well done.

Answer 6

should i add anything

Answer 7

It's difficult to criticize emotion...all I can really ask is if YOU fee satisfied with what you've written? Have you justified the help your friend has given you with this poem? Do YOU get satisfaction from the ache in your words? If YOU feel it, then so will your teacher.

Answer 8

i think it good you got this

Answer 9

bro

Answer 10

@lovelychick13

Answer 11

Should I add add anything?

Answer 12

bro at the last you were there put you were there to. but ya it rocks