Question

She sits in the dark of her room,
Tears streaming down her face like the blood from her wrists;
She cries out loud, realizing no one can hear her,
Realizing no one knows how unhappy she is.
She prays to the one person who does, the man upstairs;
She prays that, maybe, one day, someone'll notice her;
She prays that everything will be better.
She bows her head and prays, as the man upstairs takes her into his arms, and welcomes her into his home.
She is finally home...

Answer 1

very well done

Answer 2

Thanks @ispike

Answer 3

No problem you should go on wattpad and write. I love it my usernames PositivelyDyslexic

Answer 4

wow i like it x: i have a question tho!

Answer 5

I really like it the only thing that may need fixing is that she is a little repetitive and semi-colons can be used when there are a lot of commas but other than that very attention grabbing

Answer 6

I write, too.
I applaud you on your writing skills.
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Answer 7

Very Well Done!!!! *^.^* I liked how emotions just poured out with every word!! I Look Forward to reading More in the Future.
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Answer 8

@bubbles-are-cool.
You had a question?

And thanks for the advice @Countryyy_Girlyyy :)

Answer 9

Did she die?

Answer 10

@bubbles-are-cool.
Yeah... I was trying to make it seem like she was finally in a place where she belonged...

Answer 11

The home is Heaven.?

Answer 12

@lrizzi yea

Answer 13

Your voice and word choice are spectacular! You have a lot of writing potential in you. Keep writing!

Answer 14

oh thats good c:

Answer 15

Thanks @mysangels