Question

I need some help.

Answer 1

Thousands of students walking by. Girls and boys walking smartly dressed together in the same uniform speaking fluent english. Its so tough to start off a school . To part away from my mother which I had never done before.
This is a starting to "My first day at a school". How can I improvise it more ? I know it is bad .How can I improve it.

Answer 2

I think it is really good just the way it is.

Answer 3

What grade are you in ?

Answer 4

I want to modify it so that I can use the intro for"My First day at a new school"

Answer 5

I would use more description. For example
I walk down the long hallway as thousands of students pass me by. They are all wearing the same red shirt with the school patch in upper right-hand corner. Two girls pass me by speaking fluent English. I start to become anxious. If starting a new school wasn't bad enough, I'm away from home for the very first time.

( I didn't mean to rewrite your whole start! Just trying to give some ideas! Let me know if you have any more questions! I would love to help your writing!!)

Answer 6

and if I am given a topic "the most embarassing situation" ?

Answer 7

Hmmmm. The past way is it to make the reader feel like they just witnessed it.
For example:
As I was eavesdropping to the girls in front of me, I didn't notice the trash can in front of me. All of a sudden I smelt old trash. I had fallen into the trash bin. Needless to say, my first day sucked.