Question

Is this any good?
I used to think love was a game
I would always take the blame
But Now I've met you
And I've been pulled out of the blue
We've been through the ups and downs
Hell lifes thrown us all around

Your my sun when it starts to rain
You ignite my small flame
Your here when I need you most
You give me a lot of hope
Every single time you kiss my lips
I just wanna move my hips
Your my sun, my rain, my moon, the stars above
Thats what I call love
*The rest below*

Answer 1

We're still here
We're still alive
We still have our vibe
Nothing can tear us apart
We have bullet proof hearts
They could try to tear us down
But nothing is gonna bring us to the ground

Your my sun when it starts to rain
You ignite my small flame
Your here when I need you most
You give me a lot of hope
Every single time you kiss my lips
I just wanna move my hips
Your my sun, my rain, my moon, the stars above
Thats what I call love

Answer 2

you know, how to rhyme. That's good.
However, the topic is nothing new, try to look it up, internet is full of poems about love (both happy and sad). And those poems are full of moon, rain, hearts, stars, kisses, sun, fire, blame... Try to avoid those (and also things like angels, hands, hair, breathe, poison, shame... generally, you shouldn't use too sentimental expressions for emotions, simple words about spirit, things from heaven and hell, sky objects (stars, sun, moon, clouds, rainbows...) and body parts like hair, eyes, lips etc...)
Try to come up with something new.
Well, you can write about love, but my advice is - change the vocabulary. And... this poem is too general, many people feel it like this.
But isn't your love unique? I'm sure your feelings are special, so try to write about them, not about feelings of the majority.

If you want, you can also try to use longer words, the poem will be more complex then :)

I might frighten you, but don't give it up, just try and try :)
If you want, feel free to write me and I will help you if I can :)

Answer 3

And another important thing - if you have a line with even number of syllables, you should rhyme it with another even-syllable line, the odd ones rhyme with the odd ones :)