Question

The lack of a developed society creates a bastion for the children to comprehend the instability of non-civilization.

Someone please tell me what this sentence means to you, and how to correct its grammar.

Answer 1

I feel like I may be contradicting myself in "instability of non-civilization

Answer 2

"The lack of a developed society creates a bastion for the children to comprehend the instability of non-civilization."

Hmm... Children that are conditioned and raised in an underdeveloped society understand the pain and strife of a dwindled society.

Answer 3

ah! Then I am contradicting myself.
I'm trying to say that they don't understand in a fallen/unorganized society.

Answer 4

the instability of the civilization.

Answer 5

Well. Lets break it down.

>The lack of a developed society
Okay, so the society is not developed. It's poor; slum, lacks a government.

>Creates a bastion for the children
The children who grow up in this society understand and can defend it, but defend what?

>the children to comprehend the instability of non-civilization."
Okay, so you could be saying with this, that the children, because they grew up in a non-civilized society, that they understand it.

Answer 6

"The lack of a developed society ."

What are you trying to say here?

Answer 7

bastion means fortification, stronghold.
It should cause them to not be able to understand

Answer 8

Hehe. Not really in English. Bastion is like defense. You defense something.

Answer 9

Lack of a developed society
Ok so you know how in the US, we are a bit more organized? We have laws and regulations and people have responsibilities.
But these kids are put into a situation in which they are abandoned and have to survive on their own.
So I'm trying to say that
they are lacking a society which is structured.

Answer 10

ah ok, then we shall use the word fortification instead of bastion.

Answer 11

Could you explain more. Give me more context.

Answer 12

So, kids are in a society like the U.S., then they're forced to be in a less-developed society? And somehow that makes them understand the society? Huh. Makes no sense.

Answer 13

Sorry to interrupt, @Compassionate but @karatechopper shouldn't it be a lack of stronghold that the children grow in? So like it deprives them of understanding?

Answer 14

This is what I'm trying to understand, but we have poor context.

Answer 15

And if they lack a developed society, how can they comprehend instability when they have no stability to compare it to? Shouldn't it be they adapt to it?

Answer 16

Yea, it is confusing @Compassionate For a second, I thought I didn't understand the words so I looked them up again, but its not me. :/

Answer 17

i. Children are in a developed society
ii. They are abandoned in an undeveloped society (retrogression?)
i.ii, what are they abandoned? Did their society crumble? Were the left?

iii. Is there a paragraph or anything to go along with this?

It's hard to decipher information without and cues.

Answer 18

ok ok hold on.

Answer 19

Oh, are you talking about Lord of the Flies situation?

Answer 20

These kids were on a plane and they crashed into an island. They are all premature boys.
They grew up in England, obviously there was a government system there. Now they are on a deserted island with no form of contact, they have to live for themselves.

Answer 21

Mamimstumped, you are exactly correct.
This is exactly about lord of the flies!

Answer 22

It is!! Haha, why are you making this so hard for us :/ It's a pretty straightforward novel

Answer 23

So it would be: The lack of a set of rules and regulations enables the adapting and comprehension of the instability in non-civilization. Or something like that.

Answer 24

No wait, more like: The lack of a set of rules and regulations enables the comprehension of the instability in non-civilization, and, henceforth, the adapting of civilization.

Answer 25

"The indoctrination from a developed society into a primitive retrogressive landscape motions inexperience to children, and their ability to comprehend and survive emphasizes on Darwinist adaption."

Answer 26

(Shrugs) Who knows.

Answer 27

Woah woah woah

Answer 28

Woah @Compassionate

Answer 29

Like WOAH. Dude, that is too much for (likely) 11th grade

Answer 30

We basically said the same thing in different ways.

Answer 31

Before we continue.
What is grammatically incorrect about my sentence?

Answer 32

Unfortunately, everything.

Answer 33

@karatechopper Um, how to put this nicely, I agree with Compassionate

Answer 34

i. Word usage
ii. Sentence structure
iii. fluidity
...

Answer 35

It contradicts itself several times, and some parts aren't sensible.

Answer 36

I'm fine with it all being completely wrong.
Lol

Answer 37

I was iffy when writing this sentence in the first place. I get it.

Answer 38

Something you should know is that the more simple and to-the-point, the better for an essay

Answer 39

You should try this:

"The lack of a set of rules and regulations enables the comprehension of the instability in non-civilization, and, henceforth, the adapting of civilization." - @ManlmStumped

It's simple and fluid.

Answer 40

henceforth, the adapting of civilization.

Answer 41

Nah, I actually liked @Compassionate better, as long as you take out the Darwinism unless you know about it and can write a few things on it.

Answer 42

Mmm....can I cut that out?

Answer 43

Yall. I'm not trying to create a crazy sentence when this itself is a corrected sentence on my grammar lmao.

Answer 44

If you remove, "henceforth, the adaption of civilization," then what you're left with is a run-on sentence.

Answer 45

Oh stop it, @ManImStumped , I liked yours cx Mine was too boastful.

Answer 46

LOL no, and you can always use a semi-colon ;)

Answer 47

the henceforth part is talking about instability in adapting to a civilization as well right?

Answer 48

It's more of the conclusion... but, yes.

Answer 49

yeah, but it shouldn't be used. Since they don't adapt, but create.

Answer 50

well the conclusion of the story, even when they set up rules, they broke them.

Answer 51

Society and the conch both caused destruction.

Answer 52

The Conch Shell...

http://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20130406102303/spongebob/images/d/d9/Magic_Conch_Shell_with_SpongeBob.png

Answer 53

I'm trying to say that the children are unable to understand that they are in an undeveloped society.

Answer 54

Then um... The lack of a set of rules and regulations eludes the comprehension of the instability in non-civilization to children...?

Answer 55

Ugh, it sounds like a mouth-twister

Answer 56

ai.

Answer 57

Hm.

Answer 58

@Compassionate Any idea?

Answer 59

Goodness.

Answer 60

The absence of rules and regulations baffles the childrens' understandings of the undeveloped society.

Answer 61

Not baffles. It brings about the wrong mood

Answer 62

but it does confuse them, doesn't it?

Answer 63

then use confuse, or puzzles

Answer 64

Not baffles, haha, it reminds me of gaping mouths

Answer 65

The absence of rules and regulations thwarts the childrens' understandings of the retrogression.

Answer 66

The arm of society and regulations that guided their behaviors no longer comforted them, as their inclined dependent nature proved useless when meted against their inexperience and knowledge.

Answer 67

I have to go to the gym.

@ManImStumped , don't hurt your head.

Answer 68

Haha, it sounds like a story @Compassionate but I think I'm through with this. Sorry @karatechopper I've gotta get to work. Bye y'all.

Answer 69

no past tense!

Answer 70

wait is the sentence I just wrote also wrong?

Answer 71

The absence of rules and regulations neglects the children's understanding of the undeveloped society.

DONE.

I gotta go.

Answer 72

:) thanks for the help.