Question

hello im writing a essay in school i dont know how to start it off how does this sound
this is a true story about a little girl she head one sibling named ashely, but this is about the little girl.....
what do you think

Answer 1

You could write this to make it sound better.

"There once was a little girl that had a sister, Ashley, who then..." You can finish it.

Answer 2

IDK

Answer 3

you need a better hook what is it supposed to be about? personally i wouldnt start it off with there once was a little girl

Answer 4

The first sentence of an essay should grab the reader's attention! If it doesn't, then they won't want to continue. What is the rest of the essay about? I may be of some help. (:

Answer 5

i was thinking this for the first sentence
i HAD cancer when i was just 7 years of age.
hows that

Answer 6

i mean its good enough to get by but its a little on the weaker side add in some emotion or pain or experience. Add in some adjectives

Answer 7

also i would suggest opening a new question for this. Because u might get more responses, you can bump it sooner, and also people on this question no longer have an incentive because you already gave a medal away

Answer 8

IDK