Question

Is my grammar ok ?
"We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. And we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth"

Answer 1

@sammixboo

Answer 2

@iambatman

Answer 3

@Linchpin effect is a noun, you know?

Answer 4

affect is a verb

Answer 5

Can't start a sentence with and

Answer 6

hmm ok

Answer 7

what am I supposed to do?

Answer 8

You can use a comma.

Answer 9

Yeah or put therefore instead of and

Answer 10

^

Answer 11

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. Instead of and we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth

Answer 12

is it ok?

Answer 13

Sounds wrong.

Answer 14

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. [. . . . . ] we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth

Answer 15

*We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers,therefore we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth*

Answer 16

hmm sounds good

Answer 17

Yes much better

Answer 18

students* not student

Answer 19

And it should be either "choose a college student" or "choose college students"

Answer 20

ok thank you
how about this

"Because of the dual role of TV as reflection and influence, it is crucial to assess the messages sent incessantly into Indonesian homes. For this reason, we intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers, therefore we have decided to choose College students as the depiction of youth"

Answer 21

A sentence never starts with Because.

Answer 22

Just get rid of because of

Answer 23

why?

Answer 24

it is crucial to assess the messages sent incessantly into Indonesian homes (independent sentece)

because of the dual role of TV as reflection and influence (dependent sentence)

it is crucial to assess the messages sent incessantly into Indonesian homes because of the dual role of TV as reflection and influence.

Because of the dual role of TV as reflection and influence (put comma after this), it is crucial to assess the messages sent incessantly into Indonesian homes.

Answer 25

@ahomeboyslife it is not problem, isn't it?

Answer 26

@sammixboo help me

Answer 27

Ah you should make

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. And we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth

Into one sentence.

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers, and we have decided to choose College student as the depiction of youth.

Answer 28

ok

Answer 29

need help to correct this paragraph

"Because of the dual role of TV as reflection and influence, it is crucial to assess the messages sent incessantly into Indonesian homes. For this reason, we intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers, therefore we have decided to choose College students as the depiction of youth"

Answer 30

And it should be college students or a college student

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. And we have decided to choose a College student as the depiction of youth

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers. And we have decided to choose College students as the depiction of youth

Answer 31

That paragraph looks good to me

Answer 32

are you sure ?

Answer 33

Yeah it looks good

Answer 34

ok thank you...

Answer 35

therefore sounds better than and @sammixboo

Answer 36

GEt other users opinions though =) That is my opinion lol

Answer 37

It is using therefore :)

Answer 38

OOH I see

Answer 39

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers, and we have decided to choose college students as the depiction of youth

We intend to focus on how TV describes youth and affects viewers, therefore we have decided to choose College students as the depiction of youth

Either way works

Answer 40

@sammixboo @Linchpin @ahomeboyslife Ok.., thank you for your kindness :)

Answer 41

No problem!