Question

*Werewolf story*

Forever Loved by haleyelizabeth2017

feel free to comment and some pointers! Thanks!

This is my first book that I have written, so it has a lot of mistakes!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rGvIktGrjwl1H-hzFmwAnHX5K0MhLjl3POBVbJS_rA0/edit

Answer 1

*give me some pointers

Answer 2

well u could make a dramatic fight

Answer 3

Well, if this is supposed to be a short story on werewolves.... (In which case I am writing my third full on book of such creatures and more...) Make sure that they are very distinct characters. Remember to introduce them in a fashion that is best suited for the character. (Unless you want a narrator..... if so make sure the narrator has its own character as well) Make an overlying plot as well. Something they will be mainly working towards..... but sill give them things they need to accomplish on the way. I do like your writing style. But try to use more complex words and less of the simple sentences. It will get your readers thinking more and entice them. Get their brain in the book. Don't use the word wolf to much. After you introduce the school as a school of werewolves, you don't need to repeat it. Then the word wolf becomes repetitive. try not to use to much repetitive sentences... although sometimes it is necessary. I see allot of potential.. if you want me to check again later. feel free to message me. If not, I hope you finish the masterpiece.

Answer 4

that you!

Answer 5

thank you*

Answer 6

lol that is me!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 7

NO problemo. Glad to have helped

Answer 8

what's you?

Answer 9

oh! lol nvm :P haha

Answer 10

@Wolfboy any ideas for the first paragraph for chapter 3? It's going to be in Sam's POV.....

Answer 11

sorry I couldnt respond I am dealing with issues...

Answer 12

It's okay! :D

Answer 13

I don't think I will finish it though