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Answer 1

I know a girl who does not
deserve what she has heard
The top of the tree to the bottom
Of the ground just that fast

No one knows what they did
or see the tear fall on her skin
They can’t see how she felt
but decided to make her melt

my long lost sister my bestfriend
I can’t stand to see her cry
AS they laugh at her when they walk
on by

It's not funny to see a girl like her
sad, depressed, or feel like she is
nothing in this world she gets so
much of that and she doesn’t need more

Do you feel better? That you made someone
cry… she has no confidence she gives no
trust she can’t tell one soul without another
Knowing

She loves her friends she would never do
anything to hurt a soul unless they need it
She does so much and doesn’t get it back
She has a heart thats turning black

The girl that I describe has so much
to live for the girl that I describe is
My best friend The girl that I describe
Has gone through so much and that
girl is Hailey rose

Answer 2

omg tears its so good i dont know what to say

Answer 3

lolz thanks

Answer 4

i have a freind named hannah mae rose

Answer 5

thats cool

Answer 6

ya but kinda creepy givin this poem

Answer 7

chat?

Answer 8

dont give it to her please

Answer 9

No Way copywright man

Answer 10

thanks

Answer 11

gotta get back to my book man brb

Answer 12

kk

Answer 13

some stanzas need revision.
If you are rhyming this way, then try to rhyme 1st and 3rd, and 2nd and 4th lines in each stanzas (or 1st 2nd and 3rd 4th, or some other way).

I am not very good as far as the rules of poetry i English go, but there are some lacks.

Overall though, you have a pretty good job:)

Answer 14

The rhyme scheme needs some work. In the second and sixth stanzas, your scheme is ABCC. However in the third stanza, you use ABCB, and in the fourth stanza you use ABCA. The rest of the stanzas have no ending rhymes. I don't know if you are meaning to rhyme, but if you are, I suggest you pick a scheme and stick with it (I could have phrased that in a nicer way. Sorry if it comes off rude). If you aren't meaning to rhyme and this is a free verse poem, then you might want to consider removing the ending rhymes.
I like the lack of punctuation. It makes it seem like the narrator is rambling on, and in doing that, it shows that the subject, Hailey Rose, is someone the narrator is very passionate about. Be careful writing like this because it does get a little confusing for the reader.
Make sure you watch the capitalization. Don't capitalize random words in the middle of a line (the exceptions to this would be Hailey Rose as she is a person and her name needs to be capitalized, and "I").
Hope this helps.

Answer 15

that was BEAUTIFUL

Answer 16

that was amazing

Answer 17

Thanks to everyone

Answer 18

Very cool! The poem is awesome!