Question

can someone help me write an essay i'm not good at writing please help :((

Answer 1

What is your essay on?

Answer 2

prompt "pinnes up against the lockers, i had nowhere to go- so i turned to face the gang who had trapped me there"

Answer 3

thank u so much :)
@Catseyeglint911

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pinned***

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@Catseyeglint911 do u think u can help me?

Answer 6

So based off your prompt, you are supposed to write a essay/story to finish the though?

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thought*

Answer 8

Is that correct?

Answer 9

yes @Catseyeglint911 i'm uploading the paper hold on

Answer 10

Alright.

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if u give me some ideas i'll try :) @Catseyeglint911

Answer 12

First, let's get a general idea of what your story will be about. We'll use the questions in the instructions.

Why is the gang after him? (some ideas)
- drugs?
- money?
- the main character physically attacked or pranked the gang?
- maybe its over a girl?

Answer 13

In the second part it says to describe the fight, so maybe talk about if they have any sort of weaponry (knives, guns...etc), fighting styles (for example, the first person may defend himself with karate or something, for creativity if you like), and the pain the protagonist and gang experience as well as dialogue if you want.

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Like the instructions say, you can change the antagonist from a gang to something else and/or give the protagonist a name or not. That of course is up to you.

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For the third part, the aftermath, like escape. Maybe you want the reader to prevail and at the end he's standing over all the unconscious antagonist victorious, or maybe he gets the crap beat out of him and limps/crawls and yells for help.

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Maybe you leave it at sort of a cliffhanger and decide whether you include if he does find help or not or if he just lays on the ground hoping someone will find him.

Remember that you can include thought's of the protagonist in the story as well as the dialogue of everyone.

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okay i'll use the prompt as my first sentence and try to write the essay, but can u check if it sounds good or something?
thanks for the ideas u r a genius :)))

Answer 18

Of course. Post what you have (when you have it) and I'll be happy to read over it.
and you're welcome. :)

Answer 19

okiee :D

Answer 20

omg this is hard :(

Answer 21

What part seems to be causing you difficulties? The wording, creativity...etc?

Answer 22

idk..:( i'm just not good at the wording i'm stuck after my 3rd sentence...>.<

Answer 23

i used a girl as a reason for the gang to be after him but idk how to relate it to the event...
D:

Answer 24

This can be the first person's thoughts. Where he's thinking about how he got in this situation (in the corner).
You could have one of the guys in the gang (the leader would probably work best) want to beat him up for flirting with his girlfriend (or maybe he wasn't flirting and the girl just lied or the leader just misinterpreted the situation). Maybe they find him as he's walking home from school and chase him and corner him at a building to surround him. In the meantime, the leader begins yelling these accusations (flirting/kissing the girl...etc) and threats at him. Finally, the protagonist could think to himself that he's not going to put up with this slander and decides to turn around and face the enemy.
This is where the leader (or whoever you decide) begins commanding his friends to beat up the protagonist, and the fight begins.

Answer 25

ok lol ik i'm soo dumb...lemme work on it again thanks again :)

Answer 26

No, not dumb, just in need of a little creative help, and no problem. :)

Answer 27

:)

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i know i was supposed to write alot compared to the time i took but this is what i got so far
Pinned up against the lockers, I had nowhere to go- so I turned to face the gang who had trapped me there. It all started like a joke. I was rushing to get to my chemistry class and accidentally bumped into this beautiful girl. I kneeled down and picked up her books. I apologized, as I handed her the books. she didn’t say a word, just smiled and walked away. Her smile left me breathless.

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@Catseyeglint911 does that sound good?

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The only part I can see possible to revise is:
I kneeled down, picked up her books, and I apologized as I handed them back to her.

It just helps the flow.

Answer 31

Very good so far though.

Answer 32

yay thanks :)

Answer 33

The next day I entered my math class thinking about the amazing moment that I had yesterday. I walked in to the chair by the door with a smile in my face. But I didn’t know why I was smiling. As I sat down, the teacher introduced us to the new student. “hey guys this is Jessica, she’s new here and be nice to her” said the teacher. I couldn’t believe my eyes, it was her. The girl that I bumped into yesterday. The girl that left me breathless with just one smile. I spent the whole class staring at her like an idiot. The annoying sound of the bell woke me up from my day dream (lol I didn’t know what to put).
@Catseyeglint911 what should i write for them two to start talking or a way for them to meet?

Answer 34

i wanted to post the essay but i keep getting stuck :/

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The next day I entered my math class replaying the amazing moment I had yesterday in my head. Just thinking about it caused me to smile though I wasn't sure why. As I walked to my desk and sat down, the teacher announced that we had a new student. “Good morning everyone. This is Jessica.” When I looked up, I couldn't believe my eyes. It was her, the girl that I bumped into yesterday, the girl that left me breathless with a smile I couldn't break. I spent the whole class staring at her like an idiot until the annoying sound of the bell woke me up from my day dream.

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Feel free to tweak it as you wish.

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omg that was amazing!!! but what should i do for them to meet?

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@Catseyeglint911

Answer 39

Hmm let's see...
Maybe he has lunch with her and because she recognizes him from the meeting in the hallway earlier, she walks up and asks if she can sit beside him. This is a place where they can sit together, talk, and learn about each other.

Also, you may want to make this all happen in the same day. Like maybe they bumped into each other in the morning, and math happened some time that afternoon. (It would make more sense since she is in his class and he's bound to see her there the day they meet.)

Answer 40

So morning (run into each other)...then math (he finds out who she is)...then lunch (she approaches and the fun begins)

Answer 41

okay wow u r very creative

Answer 42

Thank you. I write stories and create characters for a hobby, so I've had a lot practice. :)

Answer 43

yw but that's really cool i wish i could do that but unfortunately i had F for my theater class cuz i wasn't good at making characters and writing scripts lol

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would it sound good if she tells him that the gang leader is her boyfriend?

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He could be asking her if shes made any friends or she knows anyone there, and she can respond by telling him that.

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omg i'm feeling really stupid..

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No need to.

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well if u say so lol

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It was time to go to lunch, I got up gathered my stuff and headed to the cafeteria. The cafeteria was filled with the smell of food. I sat by myself, and started playing games on my phone. A minute later, I felt someone tapping me from behind. It was Jessica; she asked if she could sit with me. “Sure” I said, the words came out all slurred. She sat beside me and we started talking. “So how do you like the school?” I asked. “It’s cool.” She appears to seem shy, but I find it cute. “You seem shy, have you made any friends or know anyone?” I said. “Well, my boyfriend goes here but I can’t hang out with him at school because he doesn’t have classes with me.” She answered. I was shocked. “Oh really that’s nice” I said, trying to hide my feelings. Once in my life, I liked someone but she was taken. I was heartbroken… The next day, I saw Jessica in my first period class. I smiled, as she waved at me. I told myself that Jessica will never be mine. So, I tried to be her best friend. We have the same schedule which brought us together. we spend a lot of time together, at school. In weekends, we text all day long. Most peoples think we are couples.

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@Catseyeglint911 u there

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I'm here. I'm not sure why but my icon keeps disappearing from the question.

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can u pm me if u can't post it here? @Catseyeglint911

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It was time to go to lunch. I got up gathered my stuff and headed to the cafeteria. When I got there, I was greeted with the smell of food. Like every other day, I sat by myself and started playing games on my phone. A minute later, I felt someone tapping my shoulder from behind. It was Jessica; she asked if she could sit with me. “Sure” I stammered. She sat beside me, and we started talking.
“So how do you like it here so far?” I asked. “It’s cool.” She appears to seem shy, but I found it cute. “Have you made any friends yet?” I asked. “No, but my boyfriend goes here except I can’t hang out with him at school because he doesn't have any classes with me.” She answered. The statement hit me like a ton of bricks.
“Oh really? That’s nice.” I replied trying to hide my disappointment though it was still evident in my tone. For once in my life, I finally liked someone, but she was taken. I barely new her, yet I was heartbroken…

Answer 54

Give me just a moment, and I'll post the rest.
Also, are you seeing the question marks that appear in the posts?

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Jesus loves all

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i see the question marks but i'll edit it it's okay :) @Catseyeglint911

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true @Da-JESUS-TRAIN

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The next day, I saw Jessica in my first period class. I smiled, as she waved at me. I told myself over and over that she would never be mine hoping it would cause me to stop liking her. It didn't. I tried being the next best thing, her best friend.
{Because we have the same schedules, we spent a lot of time together at school. We also text one another all weekend.} We became so close in fact that most people began to think we were a couple.

The part with the {} around it confuses me a bit. I know when you're writing you are supposed to stay in the same tense, but I also understand what you are trying to say (that not only did they have the same schedules back then but they still have them now, so I'm not sure)

Answer 59

Also, if you refresh the page, the marks should go away.

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And yes, very true @Da-JESUS-TRAIN

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should i remove the part with th {} ?

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the*

Answer 63

i used that part to show the readers that they are very close and her boyfriend starts to hear rumors..

Answer 64

I personally like it, but you can take it out if you wish. If you want to be safe just turn it to past tense, and you should be good.

Answer 65

Besides, you can always clarify that they still hang out with each other at the end of the story, so past tense works.

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ok brb

Answer 67

Hey will you be on tomorrow?
I'll have to get off in a bit unfortunately, but I would love to keep helping you.

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yes i will :) and i really appreciate ur help :D

Answer 69

Hey, why not make the story a little more interesting by maybe including the main character in his own gang and turn the story into a story about two gangs who were always enemies

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@slendato that's a great idea but it took more than 3 hrs to write this with the help of @Catseyeglint911 and it would take me forever and the essay is due tomorrow but thanks for the suggestion :)

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@Godlovesme

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Sorry I'm late.

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u r fine :) i was working on a project

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Do you have anything new for me to read over or shall I wait?

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i only wrote a couple lines :( wanna read it ?

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A couple days later, Jessica told me that she got in fight with her boyfriend because peoples kept telling him that I was her boyfriend. She didn't take it as a big deal. But things got serious. One day, I stayed after class to do make-up work. I went to my locker to put my stuff. Then I saw a group of gangs walking toward me, when I was trying to open my locker.

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give me one moment

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k

Answer 79

A couple days later, Jessica told me that she had gotten in a fight with her boyfriend because of the rumors that instead I was her boyfriend. It really didn't seem to bother her, but things became worse.

One question about the portion below. Are you writing the entire fight in past tense as well?
"One day, I stayed after class to do make-up work. When I finished, I headed down to my locker to put my stuff away. I could hear several footsteps heading towards me, so I turned around and was met face to face with Jessica's enraged boyfriend and his gang."

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i was thinking to do the fight in present tense what do u think?

Answer 81

hey uhm can u help me with wording the fight i never actually written a fight scene or something like than ._.

Answer 82

That makes sense. If you're doing present tense for the fight, try wording it a bit different like this...

A couple days later, Jessica told me that she had gotten in a fight with her boyfriend because of the rumors that I was her boyfriend. It really didn't seem to bother her, but things became worse. (describe some abuse he got from the boyfriend and his friends here). Eventually though it seemed to die down, and I began to think that it was over. I was wrong.
Today after class, I stayed after to make up some work. When I finished, I headed down to my locker to put my stuff away. Suddenly, I began hearing several footsteps heading towards me, so I turned around and now here I am, face to face with Jessica's enraged boyfriend and his gang."

Answer 83

ok but idk how to word the fight D:

Answer 84

hmm...give me a little time and I'll see what I can come up with.

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ok lol i'm not creative tbh

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...so I turned around and now here I am, face to face with Jessica's enraged boyfriend and his gang.
"You know you got some nerve hanging out with Jessica. Were the beatings I gave you not an obvious enough sign to stay the heck away from her?" he snarls. He then shoves me into the lockers. My head takes most of the impact causing it to begin throbbing with pain.

This is to get you started. See if you can write some more of it, and I'll look it over.

Answer 87

ok

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I tried to defend myself but he was strong as a bull. Blood runs from mouth and nose, as he punches me. Then he grabs me by my shirt, and tackles me. I fell on the floor; my shirt was all torn up. I could barely breathe or see. I wished to see Jessica before I die. So, I can tell her how I feel.
this is what i got so far ^^ i was thinking to go to the third part after this

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I try to defend myself, but he's as strong as a bull. Blood runs from mouth and nose as he punches me repeatedly while I struggle and fail to block him. Then he grabs me by my shirt, and tackles me. I fall to the floor, my shirt all torn up. I can barely breathe or see. I just wish I could see Jessica before I die, so I can tell her how I feel.

Before moving on, maybe make a sentence or two describing what the gang is doing. (maybe they're just spectating, laughing/mocking, or helping)

Answer 90

will do

Answer 91

is this good
Then I see the blurry figures of the rest of the gang standing by him making fun of me. I wonder how they feel right watching me getting beaten up to death.

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...I just wish I could see Jessica before I die, so I can tell her how I feel. Instead all I can see are the blurry figures of the the gang circling us, laughing, and making fun of me as I begin slowly slipping away into the darkness. (he doesn't have to pass out/die here, something could intervene or take place if you wish)

Sorry, I got a little dramatic there so edit it as you'd like.
Also, I only took the last sentence out since it's self explanatory.

Answer 93

that's cool it gives us more ideas for the 3rd part :)

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what if we use the part that shows how he slipped away in the 3rd paragraph

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i mean the escaping scene