Question

Is this a good thesis statement for a research paper on gender equality? Gender equality in society has significantly improved in the last 30 years. Recent campaigns and movements, however, provide strong evidence that women's participation in economic, political, and social standings are not as adequate as should be.

Answer 1

Hi! I think that it's good, but I saw a couple of minor errors.
"Gender equality in society has significantly improved [over] the last 30 years. Recent campaigns and movements, however, provide strong evidence that women's participation in economic[al], political, and social standings are not as adequate as [it] should be."

Answer 2

I hope that you don't mind...I tweaked it a little... XD

Answer 3

Overall, I think it's a great thesis! Good job! :D

Answer 4

Thank you soooooooooooooooooo much for your help @EclipsedStar :) I really appreciate your help in tweaking my thesis!!! :) I was stuck for a moment because thesis statements are not my strength when it comes to writing :/

Answer 5

No problem! You did it so well though, I almost didn't notice any errors X'D

Answer 6

Thank you! :D

Answer 7

^_^

Answer 8

Awesome job! I'd go with Eclipsed' tweaked version. Fixed some mistakes! =)

In my opinion it should be

Gender equality in society has significantly improved over the last 30 years. Recent campaigns and movements, however, provide strong evidence that women's participation in economical, political, and social standings are not as adequate as should be.

Answer 9

ill help and if i were you you may wanna fan @EclipsedStar

Answer 10

I still think the last sentence should have [it] in it @MSxSammiBooxX lol XD

Answer 11

In my opinion ;x

Answer 12

Lol it's your choice though, if you want to add "it" @RandomSnow :)

Answer 13

Might even look at "they" instead of "it", but for sure it appears as if a word is missing there!

Answer 14

Either way works =) All makes sense

Answer 15

Yup.. :)