Question

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Answer 1

But then you see the light
as darkness fades away
and your realize that there will be better days
no more paying, yet gently swaying
in the light that guides your way
no more fighting, no more pain
no more crying out when your power has drained
because you found the light, and yet regain
all your beautiful characteristics and know it will stay the same
So you walk down that alley, now filled with light, knowing that
you will no longer, have to fight.

Answer 2

wow..that was like.....omg bro...

Answer 3

huh

Answer 4

Sorry, your poem was filled with darkness, It was still amazing, but I wanted to add light you know? Like a collision of light with dark sis, its pretty cool.

Answer 5

i know...i loved it...lol....

Answer 6

x'D Keep up the good work sis.

Answer 7

wow to both you u that was amazing better than mine @fallenangelorchid @demonchild99

Answer 8

lol..i write dark poems..and then i have poems like you did...that counteract them...and thx @MakaylaTracy

Answer 9

"I don't really write poems." @MakaylaTracy xD

Answer 10

lol....but u should...what you wrote..actually made me happy..lol

Answer 11

but still that was amazing u should think about writing more

Answer 12

"Eh, maybe."

Answer 13

i have other poems....maybe u could counteract them..if i can find my book...imma hurt my sister for touching my stuff...grrr......lol

Answer 14

Haha, "Forgiveness is hard."

Answer 15

haha

Answer 16

lol

Answer 17

@TheRaggedyDoctor @this_emo_chic1023 @cupcakerain @CausticSyndicalist @monsterfox1997

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@mew-clue @Mesopretty

Answer 19

tag people for me u know more then i do

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@uri @dclemons2 @demonchild99 @AuroraB @Ashleyrh1999 @autumnm @brittanydosey @bohotness @One098 @willreel

Answer 21

i love it :'''''(

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@brittney_abshire @k12andstudyislandhelp @King.Void. @kaos_gabz @~SierraBozarth~ @~*Ashtyn*~ @~ace_chambers~ @~Truth~

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@samson245 @quin100 @Jamielynne @CausticSyndicalist @kenneth420

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@Joel_the_boss @josedavid @jojobuck @jordanloveangel @joshup

Answer 25

It good....

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@Goku-Kai @goatgal102

Answer 27

thx!

Answer 28

No problem

Answer 29

Please give her medals guys!!! thanks!

Answer 30

@hysusonic

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@ilovewolf @I_Always_Smiling @hysusonic @VortexAlliby @princesskole33

Answer 32

That is amazing.

Answer 33

thank you!..but fallen made it better

Answer 34

No problem :)

Answer 35

@Conqueror @countrygirl1431 @Cookiemonster32 @CausticSyndicalist @countryboy212

Answer 36

Is this for school or something?

Answer 37

yes was up

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@Nerd94 @nermaljean99 @Quan99 @quin100 @Werewolfprincess @wyattp17 @Radelp @Regular_x_Kidz @danish071996 @dclemons2 @Dqswag

Answer 39

tell me what u think about what my friend wrote @josedavid

Answer 40

wow.. good job to the both of you! <3 I love it

Answer 41

dang gurl..how many people do u know?....lol

Answer 42

^-^ there u go simi! u got as many veiws as i had :D

Answer 43

Thumbs up to you both!!

Answer 44

MEDALS!!!!!!

Answer 45

........

Answer 46

lol...always got that one who doesnt understand....

Answer 47

Did you like it @Quan99 ??? :)

Answer 48

@TheRaggedyDoctor @thesweetheart3 @cutiepie15 @One098

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@MakaylaTracy @mew-clue @mansaa

Answer 50

yea... it left me speechless :-)

Answer 51

@lexie<3 @leflame @LeilaJudeh @leonardo0430

Answer 52

rofl....

Answer 53

WOOOHOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!! speachless is good simi :D

Answer 54

a first....noones ever said it made em speechless

Answer 55

:D

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@autumnm @Angelus @ajenkya @adg @Angel_Bear19 @andrewhaze

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@ineedurhelpnow @ilovewolf

Answer 58

love it

Answer 59

I love it, its really good!!!

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@CausticSyndicalist

Answer 61

thanks!!!

Answer 62

@NathanHill1089

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@Librarian

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@Syli @SyedMohammed98

Answer 65

fan me please :) trying to get alot of fans.. i will fan back

Answer 66

lol....

Answer 67

okay so im gonna start off by saying that this is poetry and poetry is about no one else but the writer. But i do have some critics about it. if u dont like the critics thats fine just ignore them but i thought i would try and give u something that might actually help u rather then just calling it amazing.

So i thought it was good with a good meaning but i had issues with the flow. You did rhyme a little but i felt like that was forced. Normally when u rhyme in poetry theres almost a rhythm or beat to it and i didnt have that effect. I didnt feel like i molded into the writing. Part of that may be because of the lack of commas. punctuation in general. i think adding in some punctuation might help with that. I reread it again and honestly putting in punctuation would make this so much better. When i first read it i was kind of iffy but now rereading it with punctuation in thought i realize how amazing this poem is.

i love the repitition at the end it creates a greater effect. Great job. i hope this helps. But poetry i about the writer and the words so if u think its perfect then its perfect.

Answer 68

@demonchild99 That was an AMAZING poem! I love dark things, so this hit at all the right points for me. But , um, how do you know me exactly? xD

Answer 69

lol...i dont really know you...but when i typed in @ and an m it came up your name....and i think cuppy also tagged you

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@ispike

Answer 71

lol i committed is it not showing up?

Answer 72

Ah, okay, got it. And just out of curiosity, have you ever watched Black Butler? Your poem kind of reminded if it, so I was wondering....

Answer 73

i have a few poems i wrote, but only one stands out to me. mainly i write when i am hard on feelings or just in a unknown mood.

Answer 74

i had to refresh...lol..now i see it....and sam....i am kinda the same way...when i write...its always horrible things.....sometimes...there will be hidden messages inside..that only certain people can see....logan opened a hidden side...

Answer 75

@demonchild99 did u get my orignal comment like did it show up it was the long one

Answer 76

yea!

Answer 77

mainly all mine are about some one that i was hoping to spend my life with. then the relationship with downhill. so thats what i have on my mind 99% of the time

Answer 78

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Answer 79

@demonchild99 okay cool i hope it helped

Answer 80

~hugs sam~ well look at it this way....past is in the past...even though i should really listen to myself more.....i write whenever im going through horrible times....when u write about a breakup and keep thinking about it...it will eat you alive...dont let it do that....

Answer 81

@demonchild99 wait, did you see my question?

Answer 82

That One Special Night
They kiss in the snow.
On a silent night.
The only thing disturbed is there foot prints in sight.
They walk to the hill, to the only tree in sight.
To make a memory last, with the only things that are right.
They stand close, to keep their warmth.
To bond there love together that one silent night.
They say no words throughout the night.
To bring together the feelings that are right.
She says she will freeze, and he knows she is right.
So he hands over his jacket for the rest of the night.
He doesn’t need clothes to keep him warm,
As long as true love is in sight.
The night seems silent, which doesn’t seem right.
So they look into each other’s eyes, staying quieter than the night.
The night is still young.
Together there right.
They stayed there for hours, till it was late that night.
Till they said there first words, everything was right.
They went their separate ways after that night.
But he still goes back to that hill, for the one perfect sight.
All he remembers under that tree,
For him
For the rest of his life,
It was that one special night

Answer 83

simi is this a poem or song looks like a poem

Answer 84

@andrewhaze lol songs r a form of poetry lol

Answer 85

some odd reason it keeps blocking out words that arnt even inappropriate

Answer 86

poem is what i was goin for ...but with a little tweaking and music it can be a song...and omg sam

Answer 87

@demonchild99 what ? :D

Answer 88

lol....i love it.....i think i read it 3 times already