Question

i though i loved,
I thought i lived.
My brown hair falls into my eyes.
My brown eyes tear up.
It's amazing how the heart can chose the wrong person and overlook the right one.
It's the story of my life, because aperantly love is not on my side.
It's how my heart keeps getting crushed, and crumbled each and every time.
I loved, and continue loving but at some point of life i cannot continue hurting.
I feel the knife stab into my skin in my head, it replays each and everyday.
So many mistakes in such little time, pictures and words interchanged but I turned my back to all the past.
And hope for a brighter future as i see the light at the end of the tunnel.

I thought i met the love, the one for me.
He turned on my like i turned my back at my past.
I fell in a downward spiral, and it stunned me into a depressed state.
But i cannot let that keep me down, i did not break a bone, but only scraped a knee.
So now i will stand and limp my way back to what i thought i knew.

Answer 1

@fallenangelorchid @demonchild99 @cookiemonster2412 @ilovewolf

Answer 2

@undeadwarriorprincess @hysusonic

Answer 3

this is good

Answer 4

thanks ^-^

Answer 5

did u write this?

Answer 6

yesh, i did

Answer 7

just now

Answer 8

very nice

Answer 9

thank you

Answer 10

medal pwease

Answer 11

naw im good i still hate u

Answer 12

:)

Answer 13

O.o well then

Answer 14

i love it cuppy ^=^

Answer 15

Thanks cookie ^3^

Answer 16

im still writing it... :P

Answer 17

Nice cuppy :D

Answer 18

New edition XD @fallenangelorchid

Answer 19

Adam, I swear, don't say anything about typo.

Answer 20

X'D lets see what the "Grammar Police" has to say.

Answer 21

This is interesting...

Answer 22

I like the general idea you are trying to convey :)

Answer 23

whats the general idea?? 0-0

Answer 24

That love is beyond your reach and you've experienced pain, i suppose.. That's how i am interpreting it.

Answer 25

That and you are keeping on loving despite how much pain you've dealt with.

Answer 26

~hugs chu~ exactly!

Answer 27

*hugs*

Answer 28

Lol!

Answer 29

XD

Answer 30

xD

Answer 31

dang man...yall took my idea and yall made them ten times better...im happy and sad at the same time

Answer 32

LOL... naw, yours was more true to: "about me"

mine is like... "i wrote a story

Answer 33

lol....yea but yalls is like way better written..and easy to make out and feel emotion..im like...bleh

Answer 34

naw... :) i liked yours

Answer 35

:P :D :X XD

Answer 36

Lol.

Answer 37

They are all pretty interesting.

Answer 38

Amazing job beb ;*

Answer 39

:* thanks boo

Answer 40

:*

Answer 41

:8

Answer 42

XD

Answer 43

fail

Answer 44

Lol; XD

Answer 45

Were you trying to kiss me cuppy? ;)

Answer 46

wow thats really good

Answer 47

personally i would take out some of the pointless words. Its like u have full sentences but its a poem so u dont need to. For me thats the one thing i like about poetry. It gets to three different points in on a phrase. Its a good poem but this got me a little bored almost. if those words were taken out to make the point snappier i would have loved it.

Now poetry is about the poet and there works and that only so why we always need to have an open mind to critics we also need to know that as the poet if u think its perfect than its perfect.

Answer 48

i hope this helps and doesnt sound too harsh because its actually very good

Answer 49

thank you @ispike i really appreciate it! I'll work on that next time ^-^

Answer 50

:3