Question

the picture
so beautiful but scary
so deep and meaningful
as the red
the deep, deep red
runs in all directions
the memory of betrayal
the disgust
of the never forgiving guilt
that lives in my soul
the dark secret reminding me
as the thick streams of red
run down my leg
which is my punishment
the guilt, the pain inside me
that I will never set free
as I deserve this
for ever existing
in this cold heartless world
the picture
never as clear as before
when all lines and streams
of a thick red liquid
slowly running down my leg
remembering the moment
of batrayal

Answer 1

@MakaylaTracy @chmvijay @chainedecho @pooja195 @PyroYolka @yoindica @YouSir @Reni_Love_ELA @s\ @surryyy @william.1233 @e.mccormick @EclipsedStar @eric_d @Night-Watcher @NoelGreco @xo_kansasprincess_xo @XainSG @Ashleyrh1999 @Shadowgirl15 @alesia/bailey @princesskole33 @Great_And_Powerful @Hotchellerae21 @henrry123 @iGreen @inowalst

Answer 2

Wow! That was powerful!

Answer 3

Nice one ! But may may i know what picture is that :) Wish much more to come in near future :) all the best !

Answer 4

wow this is awesome well down i like the lack of punctuation because when u read it u read without a breath and it gives this illusion that your going on a spiral. i would however end the poem with a period or exclamation point. You could even put a comma to be kinda like this hasnt ended yet its still going. That would be kinda cool. Its all about the effect u want to give to ur audience. i think it would be kinda of cool if u capitalized some words just to give them a little more effect and to have them stand out also people will then read them differently and more powerful. i like how your not direct but i know exactly what this poem is about. This is very emotional and powerful but i didnt feel triggered which is awesome. U still brought me into the story and the imagery was amazing. Very good job. I obviously loved this poem so keep writing.

Answer 5

thanks.... and thanks for the advice..... I still have 2 more poems..... @ispike

Answer 6

@chmvijay I wasn't very direct with what I said for a reson... the picture tho.. that I visually saw was my blood which was obvious.... and the overall picture is the secret/betrayal

Answer 7

:) nice though :) do well :) God bless you :)

Answer 8

thank you @chmvijay

Answer 9

@Joel_the_boss @justnick09 @just_one_last_goodbye @Jumperman @DoShKa_SyRiA @domebotnos @Crissy15 @Linchpin @godgirl122

Answer 10

I love it

Answer 11

@MilenaSaeger cant wait to see the next two and more

Answer 12

i will tagg u when i write them @ispike

Answer 13

lol okay

Answer 14

love it keep up the great work <3

Answer 15

sorry i didnt get any noticafaction that i was tagged but anyways well done amazing work this gives the readers a feel that no other poem can give like u did

Answer 16

Good job!! ;)

Answer 17

this is awesome and I can say ik what that picture is..

Answer 18

@DoShKa_SyRiA

Answer 19

I love it! It is really powerful and meant something to me.

Answer 20

Post something new i would love to read!!