Question

Can someone give me feedback on my poem? Its in the comments.

Answer 1

The sadness, the madness, the pain,
All build up- like air in a balloon- inside of her,
Until she can no longer hold it in and like a balloon: bursts
The tears flow.
Her throats aches from holding the tears back for so long.
She has learned to muffle her sobs, blowing her nose in silence.
She only cries under cover of darkness.
Being weak scares her.
Does crying mean she's weak?
Suddenly, she is asleep.

The next day, it's the same thing:
Wake up, dress up, go to school. Wave, smile, laugh.
Her actions mask her pain; no one sees her tear streaked face.
And at night, the cycle starts again.

Answer 2

It's a very nice poem and it makes sense

Answer 3

Really? Thanks @minion10010164

Answer 4

yes it is awesome

Answer 5

wow..... it's amazing.... nice job my dear!

Answer 6

@ilovewolf Thanks!

Answer 7

awesome @Heypips

Answer 8

@Ravenn Tahnks!

Answer 9

I named this poem. Secret Pain

Answer 10

cool name @Heypips

Answer 11

@Ravenn thanks