Question

Whenever you are not near,
It's like you were never here.
I doubt what I have seen and heard,
even though I know that is absurd.
I wish we never have to be apart
Because I love you with all my heart.
I am so happy when we say hi,
Always so sad to say goodbye.
I hope we can be together,
Forever and ever.

more poems coming :)

Answer 1

Please read and give feedback, ik the last 2 don't really rhyme but the er part is the same at least. Any thoughts of fixing the end? I don't like it but I'm not sure what to do.

Answer 2

@MakaylaTracy @yaraam @demonchild99 @ispike @koolkat13

Answer 3

its fine how it is i like it its sweet :)

Answer 4

Thanks @koolkat13

Answer 5

yw

Answer 6

oooh really awesome

Answer 7

Thanks guys!

Answer 8

@horsegirl27 very nice :)

Answer 9

Thank you :)

Answer 10

Good.

Answer 11

thx. any other thoughts?

Answer 12

my thoughts on this are i would watch what like words u use meaning just choose better words but other than that amazing work keep it up @horsegirl27

Answer 13

Hmm any ideas for word choice anyone?

Answer 14

And thank you @MakaylaTracy

Answer 15

@koolkat13 what do u think, @MakaylaTracy any suggestions for changing it as u said?

Answer 16

i personally think its good, but i dont have any connection to this sort of thing or at least i didnt make one. but the structure is awesome and so is the wording well done

Answer 17

Thanks @ispike

Answer 18

it's good, all the words are good the ending is ur special way like a twist uk, i like it

Answer 19

Thanks :) and omg he still has yet to read it XD

Answer 20

@~*Ashtyn*~

Answer 21

@yaraam

Answer 22

This is really superb. Nice work.

Answer 23

Thank you @PoetryPrincess!

Answer 24

Wrote another poem:
You tell me to hurry, but you don't give help
You tell me I have to finish, but then tell me I can't do it
You tell me you don't care, so why are you still yelling
You tell me you give up, yet here we are arguing
You say you are helping, when you're making it harder
I say one thing, you hear another
I am happy, you say no
You destroy my bridges, and set up blockades
I am lost, yet you take my map


I wrote this last night and I was really mad... I wrote more lines but they weren't very well-written so I took them out. I also wrote more that I will post later. And since I wrote this I have had a change of heart, so I will write more "happy" poems tonight. Then I will post the other more "angry" poems as well so you can read them. Please give feedback!

Answer 25

Oh and this one is quick, might as well post it:
I dug a hole and I can't get out. But I'm afraid to ask for a ladder.
Or do you guys like this more?
I dug a hole and I can't get out. But I'm afraid to ask you for a ladder. You throw the dirt back in, burying me deeper, not understanding what you are doing.

Answer 26

@1DISAMAZING2345

Answer 27

@ispike @koolkat13 @MakaylaTracy

Answer 28

@horsegirl27 nice poems :). u sound upset in the first one

Answer 29

Yeah I am lol :P Thanks

Answer 30

@MakaylaTracy can u read my other poems?

Answer 31

yes ic an

Answer 32

What do u think if those two^^

Answer 33

@yaraam what do u think of them?

Answer 34

My dear, my dear, I know
More than another
What makes your heart beat so;
Not even your own mother
Can know it as I know,
Who broke my heart for her
When the wild thought,
That she denies
And has forgot,
Set all her blood astir
And glittered in her eyes

just for you........

Answer 35

OMG that was so good!!

Answer 36

damn

Answer 37

lol ikr

Answer 38

My favorite poem is:
A million stars up in the sky
one shines brighter I can't deny
A love so precious a love so true
a love that comes from me to you
The angels sing when you are near
within your arms I have nothing to fear
You always know just what to say
just talking to you makes my day
I love you honey with all of my heart
together forever and never to part.

Answer 39

@horsegirl27 that's really pretty

Answer 40

Ikr!!! I didn't write it, but it was written to me and I just thought it was great :P