Question

Still Here

Answer 1

Musing through memories,
Losing my grip in the grey.
Numbing the senses,
I feel you slipping away.
Fighting to hold on,
Clinging to just one more day
Love turns to ashes,
With all that I wish I could say.

I'd die to be where you are.
I tried to be where you are.

Every night, I dream you're still here.
The ghost by my side, so perfectly clear.
When I awake, you'll disappear,
Back to the shadows
With all I hold dear.
With all I hold dear.
I dream you're still here.
I dream you're still here.

Hidden companion
Phantom be still in my heart
Make me a promise that
Time won't erase us
That we were not lost from the start.

I'd die to be where you are
I tried to be where you are

Every night, I dream you're still here.
The ghost by my side, so perfectly clear.
When I awake, you'll disappear,
Back to the shadows
With all I hold dear.
With all I hold dear.
I dream you're still here.

I dream you're still here,
Ever slightly out of reach.
I dream you're still here,
But it breaks so easily.
I try to protect you,
I can't let you fade.

I feel you slipping.
I feel you slipping away.

Every night, I dream you're still here.
The ghost by my side, so perfectly clear.
When I awake, you'll disappear,
Back to the shadows
With all I hold dear.
With all I hold dear.
I dream you're still here.
I dream you're still here.

Every night, I dream you're still here.
Every night, I dream you're still.
Every night, I dream you're still here.
Ever slightly out of reach.

Every night, I dream you're still
Every night, I dream you're still here.
But it breaks so easily.

Answer 2

Not bad at all.
I think this has a good message, but I personally think it will be hard to fit as a song, because it has more a structure of a poem.
But who knows, maybe I'd be able to imagine it better if it was written on a sheet where you could be more precise on how the song's dynamic is.

But regardless to that, I think it's good.

Answer 3

Thank you very much. It is indeed a song and me and my friends are going to sing it for a contest at our club. It, at first, started out as a poem but my friends really liked it and I turned it into a song with the help of one of my friends. Wish us luck at the contest!

Answer 4

good luck!

Answer 5

its good but its a tiny bit like, repetitive, but otherwise its awesome!

Answer 6

is it called dream ur still here?

Answer 7

Its called Still Here

Answer 8

nice:)

Answer 9

WOW. Yet another stunner from you, Vickie. It's amazing, and you have so much talent. I'm glad to see you using it. This is killer. <333

Answer 10

it actually would seem that this isn't an original work. http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/digitaldaggers/stillhere.html
nice try tho.