hi can i have some feedback on a poem i wrote?
To the girls who think they are worthless,
The girls who think they have to go shirtless,
To get a man.
To the boys who have been rejected,
Do not tell me you have not been affected,
To the girls who did not make the cheer squad,
The girls who have flaws,
And have been scratched too hard by teenage claws.
To the boys who fight every sunrise and sunset,
And are thinking how bad could this world get?
To the people of the planet,
We are equals,
Nothing but peoples,
With a light inside of us that is being blown out,
By human palms and

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hi can i have some feedback on a poem i wrote? 
To the girls who think they are worthless,
The girls who think they have to go shirtless,
To get a man.
To the boys who have been rejected,
Do not tell me you have not been affected,
To the girls who did not make the cheer squad,
The girls who have flaws,
And have been scratched too hard by teenage claws.
To the boys who fight every sunrise and sunset,
And are thinking how bad could this world get?
To the people of the planet,
We are equals, 
Nothing but peoples,
With a light inside of us that is being blown out,
By human palms and

anonymous · Answer

worthless matters.
Don't let this world shatter.

anonymous · Answer

Very meaningful poem. Really nice!
I like it ^_^

Some things that are very noticeable:
~"We are equals, " I think it is better if it is like "We are all equal"
~"Nothing but peoples," remove the 's' in the word people.

Probably there are also other things but yeah I didn't notice it because of the wonderful message of the poem. Good job! Keep writing! :)

anonymous · Answer

I love it! The "teenage claws"=Epic!!