Question

Havent posted a poem in a while and i really like this one. Let me know what you think be as hard on me as possible. I wont get upset over critics. Critics help me to becoming a better writer. Please dont enable me. With that being said give me honest opinions, interpretations, any feed back helps

Answer 1

Speaking Blindly
for the taunting of society,
in a drifting haze
that calls the now, the future.
Beliefs of differences,
Right and Wrong are knocked down by opinion...
With the option of clarity,
just take a second glance.
Instead lack of patience
allows us to bit on a singular pieces.
Never the entirety...
So the person never seen,
is left to bleed...

Answer 2

@butterflydreamer @cupcakerain @demonickittenlover @TheSmartOne @horsegirl27 @demonchild99

Answer 3

thats amazing! i love it! you should start posting more!

Answer 4

@demonickittenlover lol yea i used to post non stop and i prob will again soon but it's been one thing after another. I haven't had the time to post lol but thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it

Answer 5

your very welcome!

Answer 6

@Baby_Bear69 @MakaylaTracy @chainedecho @chmvijay

Answer 7

@jessmitz @leahhhmorgannn @77777jeannie77777

Answer 8

I really like this.
It isn't usually something I'd read, or even look at, but i'm glad you tagged me because it was actually really good, lol

Answer 9

@leahhhmorgannn I'm so glad it still interested you. thanks

Answer 10

@geneticrockhopper247 @bohotness @BonnieB. @britanyashton

Answer 11

I like the poem. My only critics come from my grammar nazi side that calls for a couple of punctuation tweaks. Apart from that, it's fantastic.

Answer 12

where do u think that they're should be punctuation

Answer 13

TOTAL PERFECTION!!! As always... YOU GO GIRL!!! ;)

Answer 14

@BonnieB. thanks

Answer 15

My pleasure... ^^

Answer 16

Speaking Blindly
for the taunting of society,
in a drifting haze
that calls the now, the future.
Beliefs of differences,
Right and Wrong are knocked down by opinion...
With the option of clarity,
just take a second glance.
Instead lack of patience
allows us to bit on a singular pieces.
Never the entirety...
So the person never seen,
is left to bleed...

Personally, I would take out the first and second set of ellipses.
Other edits:
Comma after blindly in line 1. Take out the comma after now in line 4. Maybe a comma after wrong in line 6. Comma after instead in line 9 (I think, my counting might be a little off). Line 10, is it supposed to be "bite" rather than "bit"? Also in line 10, I would take away the period after pieces and replace it with a comma so that "never the entirety" is a part of that sentence (thus making it easier to remove the ellipses).

Answer 17

^Like I said, this is just me being a grammar nazi. I love the poem!

Answer 18

@geneticrockhopper247 lol thank and any time u see stuff like that please let me know. I love to hear specifics. For me grammars just a guideline when it comes to poetry. I normally use grammar in a certain way because of how i want it to be read or the emotion i want it to present. For other types of writing i would normally agree. Thank you for letting me know i really appreciate every thing that u said

Answer 19

No problem. I totally understand the manipulation of grammar for a certain feeling, just sometimes, I'm not clear on if that is the purpose or not (I've been working as an English tutor at school, so I usually just assume the worst). Allow me to reiterate: this is awesome!

Answer 20

i have got to pay more attention to ur poems..im missing some good shtuff

Answer 21

@demonchild99 lol im glad you like it

Answer 22

@emblebee @emmilinev @kittycat123 @Heypips

Answer 23

@butterflydreamer

Answer 24

Seems like you like to capitalize words which is good for imagery and relating to the poem. I like it a lot! Don't capitalize too many though.

Answer 25

@emblebee yea I do it for emphasis especially since I can't bold or italicize on here