Question

wrote this over a yr ago tell me what you think: poetry

also if i tagged you and you do not want to be tagged please message me privately and it will not happen again.

Answer 1

Lurking away in the empty halls
That only scream turn away
Freedom explores as the enemy
but wanted even needed
A sin is a sign
Freedom is a sin
yet Dictator is the lead; sin #1
So where is the happy medium
of this pled
To succeed in pure equality
Necessity of destruction
or perfection?
But nothing agrees
with the thoughts of humanity
For a single opinion contradicts
itself
to an evolution that never began
because it only ran.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

Wow! Better than my poem.

Answer 4

@sugarplum15 i bet yours is really good post it and tag me

Answer 5

Wow! Thats awesome!!!!

Answer 6

@xo.minnie.xox so glad you liked it

Answer 7

@chillout_WAZZAH

Answer 8

I loved it

Answer 9

@chillout_WAZZAH thank you

Answer 10

I would put "turn away" in quotes because it is a direct quotation. Also, I think you meant "plea" rather than "pled." As always, absolutely brilliant. You are an exceptional free-verse philosopher.

Answer 11

Wow! This is really really interesting nice job. But yes as geneticrock said, I would put "turn away" in quotes because it is a direct quotation. Also, I think you meant "plea" rather than "pled." As always, absolutely brilliant. You are an exceptional free-verse philosopher. Keep up the amazing work man! Have a nice day and good luck! :)

Answer 12

Great poem

Answer 13

Medals are appreciated

Answer 14

Wow this is really great!! I love it so much. You can tell you wrote this awhile ago though, because it is really good, but you have improved and you can see that. Good job!!

Answer 15

It looks good, but I'd say recite it out loud and listen to see if it sounds good to you. If it's a spoken poem, listen to the flow, find a way to make it better based off of that. That's what I do with my poems! Other than that, I'd say job well done! It's really awesome. I got good imagery from it.