Question

criticism please? :)

Answer 1

you’re my worst nightmare
the monster in my closet
yet so ethereal
one touch
terrifies me
but feeds my addiction
I watch your waves of raw emotion
thinking to myself
‘How beautiful.’
created by the demons that possess you
the monsters inside you
they terrify me
yet fill you with a spirit not your own leaving me wonder
how something
can be so
perfect

Answer 2

very good!!! the flow is a bit awkward but it's full of emotion, the key to a memorable piece of literature.

Answer 3

I love the paradox created between the perfection and the monster and the beauty and the horror. It's quite wonderful with regards to that.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

wow, i really like the raw emotion in this~ :3

Answer 6

I really love this :)

Answer 7

Amazing! love it!

Answer 8

i really like it but it for sure needs some punctuation other than that u did a great job

Answer 9

I hate punctuation! almost as much as I hate capitalization! haha

Answer 10

@jessmitz if you dont mind me asking why do you hate it so much?

Answer 11

Too many rules! the world has enough of them already!
plus it's just distracting. I think in a work of emotion the focus should be on the piece, not the technicalities. Plus without punctuation it is not clearly defined as to where one sentence ends and another begins, they bleed into each other. it creates more opportunity for interpretation. The reader must decide where to pause, what is emphasized, in some pieces (not really this one) it can entirely change the meaning. There is just so much that could be lost if I put in my own punctuation because then everyone reading it would get the same cookie-cutter version

Answer 12

@ispike