Question

My poem is called Pain because something happened yesterday. Every line is true and I am not lying.

Answer 1

Pain
My pain of your pain
Never did I feel pain
My heart is shattered
And as he lays a finger on me
All I do is being shattered
I got beatin' up and broke
Never did I think you could
He promised, He loved me
But I guess it doesnt mean anything
I tried and tried but no one would listen to me
They called me a liar, a cheat, and even worst an old weak
I keep my head down and desicover he left bruises on me
It starts from my head to under my eyes until it reaches the creek of my nose
No, no, no
He lied and forever I'm never going to be happy just pain and pain.
I cut, and not just deep but deep enought to reach
I cry and try but no one cares as I blame myself
Neverless I am 15 and at this age I'm no queen
Liar, Cheater, and what did I seek?
Love but all that is pain.

Answer 2

@<Just_Waken_Up>
@arabbride
@BlackDeathKai
@braves12
@Donblue
@epikenzie
@fallenangelorchid
@jackmullen55
@Sam_Aka_Sara

Answer 3

Please tell me what you think and no rude comments.

Answer 4

Its a great poem but its sad

Answer 5

Yeah, I know.

Answer 6

@BlackDeathKai

Answer 7

@Phebe

Answer 8

it's a good paom so sad but i like it it's great

Answer 9

Thanks @BlackDeathKai

Answer 10

Someone hit you
an tha poem so soo sad T.T
you can tlk to me
an i do like your poem

Answer 11

Thanks @Phebe and yes it was out of anger but I'm okay. My bones are fine and my finger is okay.

Answer 12

T.T FR
THAT PELLET HIT U???

Answer 13

;-;

Answer 14

It was someone in my family member but I don't feel like talking about it please. :/

Answer 15

its ight
u guud

Answer 16

Yeah I guess.

Answer 17

ye

Answer 18

@Thesmarterone

Answer 19

@leahhhmorgannn

Answer 20

hmmm...very nice ._.

Answer 21

Though there is a lot of spelling and grammar errors, I do love this. I can relate to every single line in a personal manner as I went through a highly physically abusive and mentally toxic relationship a while back. I applaud you for being about to write about it. Great job.

Answer 22

T-this wasn't about a realtionship, someone did it to me but it was from a family member.

Answer 23

Well, then that shows the versatility of this writing then.
My mistake, I guess.
But, still, this is a great job. Don't forget that part of it.

Answer 24

It's cool @leahhhmorgannn

Answer 25

I didn't realize the subject of this poem until I read the comments. Like pervious reviewers have said, I really don't like the spelling and grammar errors, but the message comes through clearly, something that some poets don't manage to communicate.

Answer 26

Sad, but good.

Answer 27

Hey:) I'm going to fix the grammar for you, okay? Just so it reads a little smoother! You are very brave for sharing this and being open with all of us, thank you.

Pain
He gave me pain
Pain as I had never felt it
My heart was shattered

As he lays his fingers on me
All I am is shattered
He beats me, breaks me, as I never thought he would
He promised he loved me
But I guess it didn't mean anything
I try and try to ask for help
but no one will listen
They call me a liar, a cheat, an old weak

When I look down, I see the bruises he gave me
It starts from my head to under my eyes
and reaches the creek of my nose

No, no, no
He lied.
I will never be happy again
only pain.
I cut, just deep enough to reach
I cry and blame myself, but no one cares
Neverless I am fifteen and at this age I'm no queen
I hear their words again
"Liar, cheat"

All I want is love
but love is only pain.

Answer 28

Sweetheart, when you get back online can you message me, please? :)

Answer 29

"All I want is love
but love is only pain. "
Super, super beautiful line.

Answer 30

Pain is terrible but everyone experiences it will allow you to learn thought :)

Answer 31

@Devilwolf3000
@jackmullen55

Answer 32

@demonickittenlover

Answer 33

this is really good.... i know how it feels to be abused.... it hurts... but it will get better once you find someone to love you...

Answer 34

@demonickittenlover thanks.

Answer 35

@AmberAlexis

Answer 36

We are with you dear @sugarplum15 :)
i liked ur poem
Have courage :)

Answer 37

Thanks @rvc

Answer 38

Thank you @sugarplum15

Answer 39

welcome

Answer 40

welcome