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OpenStudy (anonymous):

you lied to me in the beggining and end. i really truly thought you were my friend. you said you loved me... but you couldnt see... that you meant way way more to me... you turned your back and didnt trust you gave in to her dirty lust... to never see me again...

OpenStudy (anonymous):

I love the way you are going and your poem, holy spirit! That is amazing. :] I would just fix somethings like this: You lied to me from beginning to end, I truly thought you were my friend. You said you loved me but you couldn't see That you meant so much to me. You turned your back and didn't trust, You gave into her dirty lust. You broke my heart into pieces, For what we had decreases. Though I might still follow, You still left my heart hollow. You might think this is the end, But honey I'll make another friend. You treated me like a game, I'll treat you just the same. You thought you ended me, But truly now I'm free. That last parts sound dumb xD but I couldn't think of much lol. Anyway, this is just my opinion based on my mind. I truly love your poem and its creativity. Great job hun! :]

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