Question

Tell me what you think of this paragraph.
Yesterday, I had a bonfire. My grandparents and my siblings and I all roasted delicious marshmallows and let our dogs run around the big green yard.

Answer 1

needs more punctuation

Answer 2

Thanks Nar. I figured as soon as I sent it.

Answer 3

and more sentences. a paragraph is at least 5

Answer 4

Thank you, Mr. "Perfection". XD

Answer 5

Yesterday, I had a bonfire. My grandparents, and my siblings and I all roasted delicious marshmallows, and let our dogs run around the big, green yard. After we roasted those warm marshmallows, we went inside, and watched Halloween movies. My sister enjoyed the movies the most. I hate them, though. Halloween Town always makes me angry. ;) How's that, guys?

Answer 6

beter

Answer 7

Better*

Answer 8

Thank you. XD

Answer 9

MEDAL

Answer 10

There you go. ;)

Answer 11

that wasnt so hard, was it?

Answer 12

Um, no? XD

Answer 13

Yay :)

Answer 14

XD You really enjoy your medals.

Answer 15

Actually you should say, "My grandparents, my siblings and I all"

Answer 16

Oh. I see. XD Thanks.

Answer 17

Don't forget the comma's. The first sentence should be "MY grandparents, my siblings, and I all."

Answer 18

I also think you need to be a little bit more descriptive, it'll help your sentences flow better. Right now they kind of seem choppy and forced.

Answer 19

I think you need to fix your punctuation. Also, you need to make it a little more descriptive and creative.