Question

Hey guys I am applying for colleges and I am writing my personal statement. Can you help me?

Answer 1

I remember my first year of school being intimidating as ever. Riding the bus for the first time without my parents, being away from home for 7 hours at a time, and being surrounded by kids who all felt the same stomach tied in knots feeling that I experienced. I even remember forcing my dad to sit with me through one of our classes, because I was so devastatingly anxious about school. As time went on my peers and I became more acclimated to each other and our surroundings, which made for a more comfortable classroom. We all had our fair share of humiliations and our good days and bad days in the class, yet I never actually thought that my whole life would be that way.
The first time I have encountered anything, my stomach ties in knots and I am stuck trembling with fear inside. Then slowly but surely I start to familiarize myself with the situation and I become a lot more optimistic about what is happening. That is how I imagine college is like; I image that next fall I will walk into my chosen university and be filled with excitement and joy on the outside. Yet in reality I will have six year old me in the back of my head saying “you’ve got to get out of here as soon as possible.”
I have been determined to go to college since I got into avid. Avid is a college preparatory class that literally teaches students everything they need to know about how to prepare for college, and how to get through high school efficiently. I started Avid my freshman year of high school, which was the best decision I have made in my career thus far. Avid has taught me everything I know about organization, asking higher level questions, and keeping appropriate professor student relationships.
Community service was a huge part of being in avid. We had avid summer homework every summer and it included at least 12 hours of community service or 60 hours of working at a job. One of the best memories I have from community service is from freshman year during the summer. My best friend and I volunteered at Salem tennis and swim club during tennis nationals. It was going all fine and dandy until our “boss” asked me to take out the trash. Let me remind you that tennis finals are meant to have a quiet audience and little to no noise outside of the game. Long story short I ended up dragging the loudest trash can ever right through the middle of the two tennis games and you can just imagine the disappointment.
(thats what I have so far)

Answer 2

I would love to help but i just started high school(i don't think you would want advice from a freshman)

Answer 3

Hey well if you think you have some advice go for it.

Answer 4

it sounds pretty good so far , you should talk more about why you want to go this school also why you are applying to this certain school.

Answer 5

i'm not sure what you're supposed to write in a personal statement

Answer 6

Well it is just an essay that includes anything you didnt put in your application

Answer 7

Its basically just aother way to influence colleges on why you are a good candidate for them.

Answer 8

oh i see, how long does it have to be?

Answer 9

500 words maximum. I actually removed the last few paragraphs because I decided they sounded wierd

Answer 10

I remember my first year of school being intimidating as ever. Riding the bus for the first time without my parents, being away from home for 7 hours at a time, and being surrounded by kids who all felt the same stomach tied in knots feeling that I experienced. I even remember forcing my dad to sit with me through one of our classes, because I was so devastatingly anxious about school. As time went on my peers and I became more acclimated to each other and our surroundings, which made for a more comfortable classroom. We all had our fair share of humiliations and our good days and bad days in the class, yet I never actually thought that my whole life would be that way.
The first time I have encountered anything, my stomach ties in knots and I am stuck trembling with fear inside. Then slowly but surely I start to familiarize myself with the situation and I become a lot more optimistic about what is happening. Eventually nervous feeling I initially had becomes a blur and I move on. That is how I imagine college is like; I image that next fall I will walk into my chosen university and be filled with excitement and joy on the outside. Yet in reality I will have six year old me in the back of my head saying “you’ve got to get out of here as soon as possible.” With that being said I have learned that staying focused on my goals can help me to pursue the things I never thought I could.

Answer 11

So now that is what I have

Answer 12

that sounds pretty good, but is that long enough though?

Answer 13

oh nvm just saw the other message

Answer 14

but i feel like you should get advice from someone who graduated college already ,here on openstudy

Answer 15

Okay

Answer 16

k bye sorry again