Question

Poem: Life

Answer 1

Waves to be traversed
Old bones to be unearthed
It goes on forever
Why do you hate me
You haven't even begun to see
It goes on forever
New wars beginning
Old friendships ending
It goes on forever

Why have I been damned
I came into this, turns out I've been scammed
It never ends
We live to die, we die to live again
But where did it begin?
It never ends
Just stop talking you're annoying
Maybe be observant and take in everything
It never ends

It goes on forever but there was no beginning
It never ends but it never started
Nothing but a game, we all think we're winning
An empty vessel, we're all weak hearted

I'm done with this strife, the overhanging knife, the never ending fife's (lies).
I'm done with this stressful, disrespectful, unending life.

I will be posting poems randomly I hope you guys enjoy.
Tag people you think would like it!

Answer 2

@Whitemonsterbunny17
@Safa102
@party_girl
@AloneS
@cc_peach
@rebeccaxhawaii
@Hayhayz
@Electric_Blue

Answer 3

Nice!

Answer 4

nice i luv it :3 @Comrad

Answer 5

@myah
@BellaBlueBird
@escamer

Answer 6

@skatergirl147

Answer 7

@Charles.305

Answer 8

nice!!
<3

Answer 9

Thank you, thank you all!

Answer 10

anytime babe

Answer 11

That was deep. I like..

Answer 12

I try. Thanks @Hayhayz !!

Answer 13

mah bad kayla. i unfanned a bunch of people.
must've unfanned u on accident.

Answer 14

It's Okay

Answer 15

@comrad do you think you can help me with physics or anyone else please

Answer 16

tag me...
do u like the poem? :p

Answer 17

yes lol =p

Answer 18

Nice job!!!!

Answer 19

I love it!(:

Answer 20

@trinitybromirski

Answer 21

Wow @Comrad Love it. It's beautiful :)

Answer 22

Thanks @trinitybromirski

@Anaise

Answer 23

You're welcome

Answer 24

@Serenity74

Answer 25

@RhondaSommer

Answer 26

@Comrad Your poem is amazing! ^^ I really enjoyed reading it. I'm gonna check out your other ones, if you don't mind. xD

Answer 27

do you want feedback? or a good job? (there is a difference)

Answer 28

Constructive feedback. :)

Answer 29

okay so;p notice how the first two stanzas have 9 lines? you wanna keep every stanza similar in stucture UNLESS you are trying to emphasize something

Answer 30

mhm...
what about my other poem?

Answer 31

so instead of
It goes on forever but there was no beginning
It never ends but it never started
Nothing but a game, we all think we're winning
An empty vessel, we're all weak hearted

I'm done with this strife, the overhanging knife, the never ending fife's (lies).
I'm done with this stressful, disrespectful, unending life.

Answer 32

try

It goes on forever
but there was no beginning
It never ends
but it never started
Nothing but a game
we all think we're winning
An empty vessel,
we're all weak hearted
its never full? (idk just an idea)

I'm done with this strife
the overhanging knife
the never ending fife's (lies).
I'm done with this stressful
disrespectful\
unending life.
im done

Answer 33

just because of sturcture

Answer 34

I totally understand what you're staying BUUUT, what if I don't want to write poetry based on the rules. I find poetry as freeing and un-restricting and it's really hard to write down un solicited ideas in a restricted format. I could've easily done what you just did above and I thank you for your criticism because it was really thoughtful and helpful, however, I like to stick to my own writing style.

Answer 35

thats called a free verse and you're alllllreeeeady ryming

Answer 36

Rhyme just happens and idek why lol. It's like I want to rhyme but in a free verse format.

Answer 37

and you cant call it a poem then. becuase poems are all about analysis and structure. free verse is what you did here and that was good. HOWEVER; you write in the comas were there should be lines; not just one big line.

Answer 38

I feel ya

Answer 39

its whatever; but you cant call it a poem with that many syllables in one line... ^_^

Answer 40

ok, what about my other poem?

Answer 41

THIS IS AMAZING, i love it babe! :)