Question

Is it good poetry?

I don't ask questions, I just need answers/
"rhetorical statement" but its poetry too! im venting anguish!/
danger! HATE! painful thoughts need written away
and its honestly obvious writing in rhythm has always been the escape
the only honest way, i can function and process my thoughts
the honest thing to do, would be to inform you all/
these are just my written thoughts
Heres the plot, this is all i got

Demons cage my mind and it
creates deranged vintage
thought process, a feelin
no one could ever capture, cant steal it.. (all i got so far really)

Answer 1

I rap. I should say it's written in that form rather than poetry form.

Answer 2

It would be better if it had an established metre in all of the lines. Try to make the rhythm the same in the rest as it is in the first two lines.

Answer 3

I liked it, but it'd be better if you try to connect them with each other better

Answer 4

there both on beat, going together yk. openstudy wouldn't let me write more right then lol, thats just a free write

Answer 5

thank you for the feedback!

Answer 6

i like it

Answer 7

thank you. :)