Question

Can someone help with a simile for anxiety?

Answer 1

A simile....like
I'm as anxious as a cat near water? ;) XD

Answer 2

Well I have to write a poem and I chose to write about anxiety
It needs to be 10 lines long
2 instances of strong imagery
3 poetic devices connotation
a word pattern.

this is what I have

Anxiety
It came out of nowhere
so unexpected, so quickly
It changed my life
from one day to another.
It sucked up my happiness
and replaced it with stress and depression.

what do you think?

Answer 3

If I was to change It came out of nowhere to It slapped me in the face
would that sound good and would it count as personification?

Answer 4

ah I'm not sure :/

Answer 5

it would be counted as personification but i don't really like how it sounds it with the poem

Answer 6

Anxiety
It came out of nowhere,
so unexpected, so unfair.
it changed my life ,
from one day to another.
It sucked all of my happiness
and replaced it with such stress.
i have to confess,
anxiety became obsessed with me.

hows this?

Answer 7

@babyx3boo to be honest i tried thinking of words to rhyme with your poem and try not to change it that much, i personally have a poem book but to think of a poem, it usually takes me hours to make it good. sorry.

Answer 8

Omg i really love it!

Answer 9

It sucked up my happiness would count as hyperbole correct?

Answer 10

@kalem03

Answer 11

wow y'all i really like it so far

Answer 12

Thank you @quin100 just need a couple lines more

Answer 13

wow thanks i am glad you guys enjoyed it:). sorry my computer wasn't letting me read the messages. and yes i am pretty sure it would count as hyperbole

Answer 14

@babyx3boo

Answer 15

uhh i did 9 lines instead of ten sorry

Answer 16

there's only 8 cause i don't think anxiety counts that would be the title.
and what other devices is there? I only have hyperbole , i'm so bad at figuring out devices lol except metaphor cause thats easy

Answer 17

@kalem03

Answer 18

I only see personification, metaphors and repetition for literary devices. Assuming y'all are usin the last draft posted, of course 🐢 @kalem03 @babyx3boo

Answer 19

what about hyperbole?

Answer 20

@biooverload

Answer 21

ok so i guess there isn't hyperbole i thought their was @biooverload @babyx3boo. ok there is a word pattern, i see the personification there is metaphors and repetition, like biooverload said. two more lines ok let me think.

Answer 22

Hyperbole is exaggeration. You could always sell it as exaggeration FOR your personification, if you really wanted to

Answer 23

so "it sucked all of my happiness" isn't a hyperbole? @biooverload

Answer 24

Nope. That's personification of anxiety. Because "it" refers to anxiety, it's personification. You could rewrite it as "It sucked every ounce of my happiness" to get your hyperbole

Answer 25

Anxiety
It came out of nowhere,
so unexpected, so unfair.
it changed my life ,
from one day to another.
It sucked all of my happiness
and replaced it with such stress.
i have to confess,
anxiety became obsessed with me.
Though I thought I could control it,
there is much chaos inside me.

is this better it has 10 lines?

Answer 26

I would say that "it destroyed all my happiness" would be a hyperbole. Or something along those lines.

Answer 27

@kalem03 you are so good with poems! do you write poems?
@ThoriteGem gotchu thank you!

Answer 28

Thanks! Yea i do ever since i was around 6 lol

Answer 29

I like it @kalem03! Yeah, what @ThoriteGem said would also work as well. It's shorter so you should use his. If I may make a suggestion, I try to use really short and blunt phrasing for my strong imagery poetry. Using "destroyed" helps with that. I use thesaurus.com a lot, btw

Answer 30

so instead of sucked, destroyed? @biooverload

Answer 31

Or hers lol I never realized I assumed @ThoriteGem was a gguy til I just saw what I posted lol sorry

Answer 32

Yeah, I would use something like that. Just stronger words

Answer 33

I love writing stories and poems with hyperboles and imagry like that. And I'm a guy @biooverload XD

Answer 34

ok so @babyx3boo the line where it says it sucked all of my happiness out you could leave it like that for personification, or change it to It sucked every ounce of my happiness like @biooverload said. Its your choice

Answer 35

@ThoriteGem I apparently subconsciously knew that? Lol

Answer 36

Nice @biooverload . Do you have a psychic gift or something?

Answer 37

@kalem03 @biooverload @ThoriteGem I like the, it sucked every ounce of my hapiness , i like the way it sounds

Answer 38

what are the other devices @kalem03

Answer 39

lol yea i use thesaurus.com a lot too lol.
yea destroyed could be used too, i kinda like sucked every ounce of my hapiness . but, that's just my personal opinion though.

Answer 40

Yeah i left sucked :p @kalem03

Answer 41

@ThoriteGem um not to my knowledge lol I'm generally wrong, so this little win helps xD 🐢

Answer 42

@kalem03 I also use this rhyming website? I forget the name but it looks ratchet as all get out but it works xD lol

Answer 43

Well, @babyx3boo , I hope you get good marks on this poem!

Answer 44

so i think this is good right? we covered everything right? @biooverload @ThoriteGem @babyx3boo

Answer 45

@thoritegem thank you :)

Answer 46

@kalem03 just need help finding the metaphor and the repetition.

Answer 47

oh that's right ok

Answer 48

is Anxiety became obssessed with me the metaphor? @kalem03

Answer 49

no cuz a metaphor is a direct comparison of two unlike things

Answer 50

do you have to have a metaphor?

Answer 51

you guys said there was a metaphor correct? @kalem03
and i don't have to, but i do need 3 literary devices

Answer 52

That line is still personification and (depending on the teacher lol) hyperbole. If you wanted to make that line a metaphor you need to make it something like "Anxiety became me" or something like that. That would give you personification and hyperbole again for sure, along with metaphor, I believe

Answer 53

I didn't see a metaphor. I saw personification and hyperbole @babyx3boo

Answer 54

well, it has repetition that's one,i guess it does have a metaphor biooverload said it did, and there is personification, those all qualify for literary devices according to google

Answer 55

if we did everything right, im pretty sure you should be getting a good grade

Answer 56

well we changed personification to hyperbole correct? @kalem03

Answer 57

what would the metaphor be though? @kalem03

Answer 58

I don't see metaphors. I see personification and, yeah, repetition. I forgot about it lol you have three literary devices tho so you should be good @babyx3boo

Answer 59

Anxiety
It came out of nowhere,
So unexpected, so unfair.
It changed my life,
From one day to another.
It sucked every ounce of my happiness
And replaced it with such stress.
I have to confess,
Anxiety became obsessed with me.
Though I thought I could control it,
There is much chaos inside me.

@biooverload @kalem03
this is the poem we have now
1.Repetition
2. Hyperbole
3. ?

Answer 60

if you don't need to have hyperbole, i think you should change it to personification
but according to google hyperbole is a literary device.

Answer 61

The third is personification

Answer 62

nevermind you should leave it hyperbole

Answer 63

Yeah hyperbole is one @kalem03

Answer 64

And, generally speaking, there's no punctuation in poetry. At least, not in the ones I write lol

Answer 65

ok so we have all three then
hyperbole
repetition
personification
@biooverload @babyx3boo

Answer 66

If you wanna keep punctuation, I'd change the comma after line 7 to a colon

Answer 67

Yup @babyx3boo should be all good

Answer 68

What is y'alls word pattern tho? @babyx3boo said she needed one

Answer 69

@biooverload @kalem03
It change my life would be personification then?

Answer 70

Yes, because "it" is anxiety

Answer 71

Alrighty, thank you so much! all of you :)

Answer 72

You're welcome. Good luck! Not that you need it lol

Answer 73

no problem :) if you need se just let me know :)

Answer 74

your welcome and dang this is good i love it<33