Question

Could someone please revise my essay? I've re-read it several times and I think it looks great, but I'd like a second opinion!

Answer 1

To whom it may concern,
Being nominated to be a member of the National Technical Honor society is an honor in itself and I feel that I could be a great asset. I have always looked forward to being nominated and it shows that my hard work and achievements have paid off. I believe that I could be a great asset to NTHS because I am a hard worker, I maintain good grades, have leadership qualities, and I possess a positive attitude.
I hope to prove myself a good example and be someone that can be looked up to as well as helping those who ask of it. I am committed to maintaining a B+ or higher and will continue to strive to do my absolute best. I currently hold an A+ with minimal absences. My grades are important to me however my top priority is being able to learn new things and take them with me in life.
Becoming a member of the NTHS would open doors of opportunity and improve my character by allowing me to develop leadership qualities that could benefit me in the future.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Answer 2

Sure I gotcha :)

Answer 3

comma after that can be looked up to,

Answer 4

Thats the only error i see, great essay

Answer 5

Thank you! :)

Answer 6

i wouldnt even call it an error, i just think it would flow a little bit better! :)