Question

could I have some tips on how to make my thesis statement better? i've never been to good at them.

Although firefighting is perceived to be a man’s job there are still women who do it. Woman who happen to be in the fire service should be treated equal to their male acquaintances by them but some men in the fire service tend to think woman don’t even belong on the totem pole when it comes to firefighting. We are all human, all the same on the inside. The only difference is the physical feats that each sex has. Just because of this slight difference doesn’t mean women and men should be trea

Answer 1

Well, what is the purpose of the article you are doing? Inform, persuade, or entertain?

Answer 2

It's supposed to inform but have an argumentative factor.

Answer 3

Well, this doesn't seem very bad, there are some grammar errors i see though:

In your second sentence the two times you put woman it should actually be women. In your first sentence after man's job there should be a comma. In your second sentence after by them there should be a comma. That's all I can see though! other than that, this isn't bad!

Answer 4

Oh, and it seems like a persuade article right now, maybe sprinkle some more facts and records about woman firefighters? But that's all I can say about it.

Answer 5

Okay, thank you very much for your help. It was very well needed.

Answer 6

No problem! I am happy to help!