Question

Any suggestion for a title on GMO controversial essay?

Answer 1

What's your platform?

Answer 2

uni (academic writing)

Answer 3

Is it an essay on the fact that there is a controversy, or are you taking a side?

Answer 4

I should take a side

Answer 5

Which side are you planning on taking?

Answer 6

I am in favor of gmo.

Answer 7

Do you mind reading my essay and give me a short feedback in order to further improve my grade?

Answer 8

Gladly

Answer 9

Thanks :)

Answer 10

I apologize if this is too harsh, I have really high standards.
Also, this is so far only for the first and second paragraphs.
• Overall, make sure to say genetically modified food instead of GMO food or GMO organisms because the O in GMO is a noun, and you can't double the nouns in that way.
•Also, indent your paragraphs (hit the space bar 4 times)
1st paragraph
•In the title, every word except "and" should be capitalized
•In the second sentence, there should be a comma after "traits"
•In the last sentence, "current" should be changed to "currently", "increase" should be changed to "increases", and the "promotes efficient land use" should be changed to "promotes a more efficient use of land"
2nd paragraph
•In the first sentence, I'd change it to "...2050 (No comma) causing the world's peoples to be both wealthier..."
•I would make the second sentence into two sentences. "...adequate food. Here, genetically modified food holds promise..."
•In the third sentence, "undermines" shouldn't have an S, and it should be "Earth's", not earths (It is both possessive and you are referring to Earth the proper noun, not earth as in any dirt)
•You might want to replace some of your "arable"s with "farmable land" as right now it is pretty repetitive
•In the 9th sentence, it should be "increased" or "increasing", and you should take out the semicolon and replace it with a period.
• In the now-10th sentence, it should be "herbicide-tolerant" because it's a compound word. Also, move the comma that is currently behind "11.8%" and put it behind "Mexico". Additionally, it should be "contributed to", not "contributed".
•Make the 13th sentence into two sentences exactly where you currently have a comma.
• In the now-14th sentence, make "hypothesis" "hypotheses", and add "our" before environment.

Otherwise, this is all very well argued!

Answer 11

Is Chemical Pesticide a company, or why is it capitalized and singular?

Answer 12

Thank you so much for your time and help, should I use more transitions and better vocabulary and i am sorry to bother you again

Answer 13

I, personally, am not big on transitional words/phrases. It really depends on what your teacher or professor prefers.
Overall your vocabulary wasn't bad, just, as I mentioned, use variations on arable.

Answer 14

Yeah done editing, I should use a wide range of vocabulary because we are marked on vocabulary which holds up to 5 marks out of the total 35 marks.

Answer 15

On my previous writing I scored a 2.5 on vocab although I used good vocab. Any tips?

Answer 16

A trick that I like for making my vocabulary seem more elevated is by using the stretched out versions of words. (i.e. "in order to" instead of "to"

If Chemical Pesticide is a company, then your 3rd paragraph is great!

4th Paragraph
*1st sentence: don't capitalize consumption unless you randomly started talking about Tuberculosis
*2nd sentence: "working at" not "working for". Also, "research had found". Additionally, don't forget the comma after Pustazi
*6th sentence: "non-GMO"
*8th sentence: I think you mean "glyphosate", not "glyohphosphate". Also, capitalize "roundup ready" because it's a brand. You also might want to introduce the brand in case your audience doesn't recognize it.
9th sentence: "dissolves" not "dissolve" and "...specific sites, just like a key in a lock, causing mortality."
10th sentence: Remove the dash before "Unlike" and "mammals' " because it's possessive. Additionally, "...several ways, which..."

Answer 17

Nope, it meant the pesticides sprayed to control weed and insects.

Answer 18

Alright, then the only thing that you need to do is to remove the capitalization there.

5th paragraph
1st sentence: "GMOs" not "GMO", and try "...a myriad of potential..." to bolster your vocabulary score
2nd sentence: "These benefits include plants with a superior resistance to disease and strategies for increasing crop yields addressing the challenges of feeding ten billion people in a new and significantly more sustainable way."
3rd sentence: "Despite our over-inflated egos telling us that we are the only children of Mother Nature, insects and weeds can also evolve to become resistant to GMOs because nature is neutral, which is exemplified by all species getting the same ability to grow and develop."
4th sentence:All of these are truly legitimate concerns, but science can make an enormous impact to overcome these problems and to allow us to prevail throughout the future. This is because we are on the brink of facing one of humankind's greatest challenges.

Answer 19

Now I know why I scored a C on my previous paper :D. How can I improve my English writing?

Answer 20

I explained most of my corrections, but if you have a question as to why I corrected something the way that I did, feel free to ask.

Answer 21

hey plz put this in righting plz

Answer 22

Nope I meant my style of writing in general. I've got the mistakes you have mentioned :)