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i need this English essay fixed by tomorrow please help

Answer 1

Can you post the essay?

Answer 2

Freedom and Democracy Comes To Nagasaki


When the United States bombed Nagasaki it Affected Japan forever. What were the social, economic and political effects of the bombing?




“I am tired and sick of war. Its glory is all moonshine. It is only those who have neither fired a shot nor heard the shrieks and groans of the wounded who cry aloud for blood, for vengeance, for desolation. War is hell,” said William Tecumseh Sherman

War… War never changes. War is an inevitable part of the continual evolution of human struggle. Since the dawn of mankind blood has been spilled in the name of everything from god to justice to pure psychotic rage. Whether it's a mere skirmish or an all out war, people, from soldiers to women and children, will die.
When Japan was plunged into a nuclear holocaust. The world was forever changed, never to be the same. In the early days of the event thousands were spared the horrors of the holocaust by taking refuge in massive concrete and steel bomb shelters. When they emerged. They had only the hell of the wasteland to greet them. On that fateful day when fire rained from the sky. The giant steel door of imperialistic Japan was torn open, never to close again.
On a clear August day in 1945 the peace and quiet of a Wednesday afternoon was shattered by the deafening droning of a large plane. The humming could be heard for miles. To those who looked up all they saw was three American bombers. Since the air raid sirens hadn't sounded many Japanese citizens didn't feel the cold hand of the sinister evil stealthily creeping onto them. The plane dropped a single item with a clearly visible alabaster parachute.
As the plane sped off what happened next can only be described as a living hell on earth. There was a bright blinding flash of white brighter and hotter than phosphorous. That bathed the small Japanese town in a swathe of pure and utter destruction that expanded for miles. As the bomb grabbed and threw millions of pounds of rubble, dust and debris thousands of feet into the air. The sky grew dark and thats when the real nightmare started looking around all that could be seen was houses church's schools and building's destroyed in the blink of an eye.
Fire was everywhere and for those unfortunate enough to still have their hearing. All that could be heard was screams of intense pain and agony as men women and children burned alive. Their skin scorched by radiation and dripping off of them in some places. Their hair evaporated, their eyes and nose severely damaged.
These unfortunate thousands had just been witness to the single largest American air raid in history. They were the first to experience the true pain and suffering caused by the ravages and destruction rendered by atomic radiation. Even to this day their woes and otherworldly cries of despair still echo through the ages in the lonely streets of Nagasaki where people are still effected by radiation poisoning.
In the blink of an eye the memory of the atrocities committed. Would be forever burned into the hearts, minds, and souls of the Japanese with a fire hotter than radiation for many generations. Thousands were killed by an ungodly force that can only be described as hellish. What caused this who would do such a thing and why.
“We shall defend our island, whatever the cost may be, we shall fight on the beaches, we shall fight on the landing grounds, we shall fight in the fields and in the streets, we shall fight in the hills; we shall never surrender”. Said Winston Churchill
4 years after America entered the war with the sound of our sailors screaming in pain and agony ringing in our ears. The sight of our navy burning and sinking fresh in our minds. With the tears and broken dreams of many young men burned into our memory. And with the orphans and widows of pearl harbor victims calling for the immediate destruction of Japan.
We gathered in Potsdam the American, British and Russian officials demanded that Japan surrender. The allies promised to rain hellfire and utter destruction down on the heads of every Japanese man, woman, and child.
We had dropped bombs on the civilian population in order to show them that we were not scared to get our hands dirty. Not scared to fight Japan in a bloody house to house conflict. Not even if it meant that a million Americans and a half million British soldiers would die trying force them to surrender.
Instead this stocked the fire with hatred for the allies. The Japanese people were only more determined to win the war and destroy the allies. Emperor 昭和天皇 Shōwa-tennō refused to surrender promising that Japan would fight until the very bloody end. The empires navy was destroyed not a single ship remained. Her air corps lay in ruins and discombobulation. The empires soldiers were scattered world wide. And her allies were destroyed yet Japan still stood tall bloody and bruised. Yet still Japan stared down the allies and refused to surrender.
They wanted to save face for their ancestors waiting in a celestial space. They wished they had surrendered because we went and kicked their precious face down to the other place. We dropped the bombs first on Hiroshima then a few day later on Nagasaki.
Truly the snake of the pacific had its head cut off the emperor finally folded. He surrendered on September second nineteen forty five. We showed the world what power we held at our finger tips we. Showed everyone that we could decimate an entire city within seconds.
The actions of the emperor had long lasting effects on his people. Because he was too prideful and arrogant hundreds of thousands of innocent men women and children burned alive in a hellish nightmare he lived until 1989 but he destroyed Japan while talking about peace he attacked America and stabbed us in the back he dragged his people into a war they didn't want and because he couldn't just surrender he single handedly forced the allies to nuke Japan the dreams and hopes of his people were shattered wifes would never see their husbands children would never see their parents and men would never again see their families because this man didn't want to sign his name on a peace treaty four years prior and he got to live a full life and he died knowing that he was to blame for the nuclear bombing of Japan






“Battle is the most magnificent competition in which a human being can indulge. It brings out all that is best; it removes all that is base. All men are afraid in battle. The coward is the one who lets his fear overcome his sense of duty. Duty is the essence of manhood.” said George.S.Patton

but out of destruction came beauty when America invaded mainland Japan we taught them many trades we cleaned up the rubble of traditional wood and paper houses and we built homes for them from bricks and mortar from planks and boards we trained many Japanese men in the art of carpentry we plumbed much of Japan for clean water and electricity we taught them how to run generators we trained them to be scientists and inventors and now 71 years later Japan is the 2nd most efficient nation in the world behind Germany and the most technologically advanced nation on this planet since then Japan has invented robots pocket sized computers and many other things on august 8th 1946 the seeds for the future of humanity were sown in the radioactive rubble of Nagasaki and Hiroshima and the trees of technology and life grew to forever entwine Japan in the fate of humanity and Japan will forever be a world leader carrying the hopes and dreams of this world on their shoulders and will forever be a main player in the ever lasting struggle for the survival of the human race I think Americans need to know about this because this shows Americans that we will meet violence with violence and if dictators should rise against us we will speak to them in the only language that the enemies of America seem to understand: violence Americans should also know about this because even though we killed hundreds of thousand of people we saved many more lives that would be lost if we invaded and we modernized a backwards nation thanks to us Japan now has a future as a healthy and productive world power we turned them from a destructive county bent of destruction and death and we molded them into a nation that can forge into the future with the skills and tools to help others and to be a force for good and justice

so in conclusion “The cost of freedom is always high, but Americans have always paid it. And one path we shall never choose, and that is the path of surrender, or submission,” said John F. Kennedy
and the decision to drop the bomb was very controversial and will remain that way for many years to come but if you ask yourself did it have to happen just carry the words of president Truman

"Having found the bomb we have used it. We have used it against those who attacked us without warning at Pearl Harbor, against those who have starved and beaten and executed American prisoners of war, against those who have abandoned all pretense of obeying international laws of warfare. We have used it in order to shorten the agony of war, in order to save the lives of thousands and thousands of young Americans."

Answer 3

this is what i have so far

Answer 4

I don't know much about this. If you post the essay in the History section, they could help

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thank you but i don't need history help i just need help fixing the grammar and punctuation nothing else lol

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Oh okie. I can help then

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thank you so much your a life saver

Answer 8

For the line:
'War… War never changes. War is an inevitable part of the continual evolution of human struggle.'
You could combine them to get:\
'War is an inevitable, and unchangable part of the continuous evolution of the human race.'

Answer 9

For the line:
'Since the dawn of mankind blood . . .'
You can add a comma after 'mankind' and before 'blood'. It'll look like:
'Since the dawn of mankind, blood . . .'

Answer 10

For the line:
'blood has been spilled in the name of everything from god to justice to pure psychotic rage.'
You can add a : after 'everything' and before 'from'

Answer 11

For the line:
'When Japan was plunged into a nuclear holocaust. The world was forever changed, never to be the same.'
The first sentence is only part of a sentence, so you can replace the period with a comma and combine the two sentences

Answer 12

For the line:
'In the early days of the event thousands were spared the horrors of the holocaust by taking refuge in massive concrete and steel bomb shelters.'
Say what the event was instead of saying 'the event'.
Add a comma after '[the event]' and before 'thousands'

Answer 13

For the line:
'When they emerged. They had only the hell of the wasteland to greet them.'
Combine the two sentences by replacing the first period with a comma.

Answer 14

For the line:
'On that fateful day when fire rained from the sky. The giant steel door of imperialistic Japan was torn open, never to close again.'
Combine the two senteces by replacing the first period with a comma.

Answer 15

For the line:
'To those who looked up all they saw was three American bombers. Since the air raid sirens hadn't sounded many Japanese citizens didn't feel the cold hand of the sinister evil stealthily creeping onto them.'
You can add a comma after 'up' and before 'all'.
Add a comma after 'sounded' and before 'many'

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For the line:
'There was a bright blinding flash of white brighter and hotter than phosphorous. That bathed the small Japanese town in a swathe of pure and utter destruction that expanded for miles.'
You can replace this with:
'There was a bright, blinding flash of white that was brighter and hotter than phosphorous. This bathed the small Japanese town in a swathe of utter destruction which expanded for miles.'

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For the line:
'The sky grew dark and thats when the real nightmare started looking around all that could be seen was houses church's schools and building's destroyed in the blink of an eye.'
This is a run on sentence. Turn it into two separate sentences and it willl be great.

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For the line:
'Fire was everywhere and for those unfortunate enough to still have their hearing.'
This is an incomplete sentence. Add a comma instead of the period and finish the sentence.

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For the line:
'Their skin scorched by radiation and dripping off of them in some places.'
You could say 'Their skin was scorched by radiation . . .'
What was dripping off of them?

Answer 20

For the line:
'Even to this day their woes and otherworldly cries of despair still echo through the ages in the lonely streets of Nagasaki where people are still effected by radiation poisoning. '
Add a comma after 'day' and before 'their'

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For the line:
'In the blink of an eye the memory of the atrocities committed. Would be forever burned into the hearts, minds, and souls of the Japanese with a fire hotter than radiation for many generations.'
Add a comma after 'eye' and before 'the'
Take the first period out and it will turn into one amazing sentence!

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For the line:
'What caused this who would do such a thing and why. '
This is two different questions. After separating them it should look like:
'What caused this? Who would do such a thing and why?'

Answer 23

Explain how the quotes relate to the main message of the essay

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thank you so much

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np :)

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For the line:
'4 years after America entered the war with the sound of our sailors screaming in pain and agony ringing in our ears.'
What happened after this? Add the answer to the end of the incomplete sentence. Don't forget to add a comma after 'ears'

Answer 27

For the paragraph:
'4 years after America entered the war with the sound of our sailors screaming in pain and agony ringing in our ears. The sight of our navy burning and sinking fresh in our minds. With the tears and broken dreams of many young men burned into our memory. And with the orphans and widows of pearl harbor victims calling for the immediate destruction of Japan.'
Is this upposed to be a long sentence? Each of the sentences start making it sound so.

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For the line:
'We gathered in Potsdam the American, British and Russian officials demanded that Japan surrender.'
If this is for a history class then you need to be specific as to who 'we' is

Answer 29

For the line:
'We had dropped bombs on the civilian population in order to show them that we were not scared to get our hands dirty.'
Same as the last comment. If this is for a history class then be sure to specify who 'we' is

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For the line:
'Not scared to fight Japan in a bloody house to house conflict.'
Who is not scared? Add the answer to the begining of the sentence

Answer 31

Starting paragraphs with quotes, is not preferred. I also would like to point teachers dislike it quite a lot when you start a paper with a quote right off the bat. (Of course this depends on the grade level.)