Question

Her eyes; they stand out,
Never cheerful, never bright,
Instead, they ache
Filled with pain
Holding a simple emptiness
One that can never be explained,
Her smile; with it she let's them believe
That she's happy,
That she's really free,
It make's them believe that she's always had this belief,
They think that she's never felt pain,
Her scars stay invisible,
To everyone but her,
There's a loneliness that lives by her side,
Angered by the what she knows,
Afraid of what she doesn't
All she's wanted is someone to love her
@Atsie

Answer 1

I like what you've got going on here in this poem, but I must point out that you are writing it in the form of fragments where it kinda reads choppy and the thoughts are a bit to loose and strayed. I am not aware if you would like it to read that way but maybe throwing a few transitional phrases in would help redeem that. ^o^
This definitely speaks to a story your trying to write though and that is what in the end becomes most appreciated. Thank you for tagging me! <3

Answer 2

Thanks for the advice!

Answer 3

You're welcome! ^.^